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Cashmere Sweater - Musicoin Link Cashmere Sweater - Soundcloud Link This is a song I wrote 2 years ago for February Album Writing Month. It has always been one of my favorite songs to come from that challenge. Till now it has been an acoustic demo which I think can be found on my Soundcloud profile. I just rerecorded it using BIAB to produce the instrumentals. I hope you like this song as much as I do. Let me know what you think. Technical NotesReal Tracks: 522:Guitar, Acoustic, Fingerpicking 1856:Cello, Background Pop Country 2488:Bass, Acoustic, Bowed Held 624:Fiddle, Soloist, George I mixed everything for this song in Cubase 9. I just got Ozone 8 and Neutron 2 and this is the first song that I've used them both on. I put neutron on the instrumentals and used built in presets for each instrument. It was also used on the vocals and mix bus. On the vocals I used Neutron, Butch Vig Vocals and Softube Saturation. I also used 2 sends for slapback delay and reverb. On the mix bus I used Abletunes Space and Drive Knobs, Final Mix Mixbuss EQ and Neutron visual mixer on the to give some more width and depth to the mix. I finished it off with Ozone where I used the Gentle Acoustic preset then added a Sterio Imager and made tweaks on everything till I got the mix I wanted. LyricsI miss my cashmere sweater. It left me yesterday. I miss my cashmere sweater. It up and ran away. It had a little hole on the lower left side. Where I’d stick my finger inside. It was so warm and soft to the touch. Oh how I miss it so much. I miss my cashmere sweater. It left me yesterday. I miss my cashmere sweater. It up and ran away. It had a stitch on the right hand pocket. From where it got snagged on the bedroom closet. I liked to hold it close on dark cold nights. We'd just sit and stare up at the moonlight. I miss my cashmere sweater. It left me yesterday. I miss my cashmere sweater. It up and ran away. It was grey. It went with anything. Now it’s gone. I can’t believe this is happening. It smelled so sweet like her perfume. It had a smile that could light up the room. Oh how I want it back. I want it back by my side There is no other one. It lit up my life. Now I’m so lonely. I could use its company. It use to hold me but now it runs from me. Oh it runs from me. I miss my cashmere sweater. It left me yesterday. I miss my cashmere sweater. It up and ran away. Cashmere Sweater - Musicoin Link Cashmere Sweater - Soundcloud Link [u][/u]
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Hi Samuel Davis So I presume the girl took it! Does the sweater make the women? Like the suit makes the man? Interesting detailed song. I like this song. Thanks for posting it
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Hi Samuel Davis So I presume the girl took it! Does the sweater make the women? Like the suit makes the man? Interesting detailed song. I like this song. Thanks for posting it It was never his in the first place. The sweater is hers and is used as a metaphor for their relationship.
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Boy, I like that song, you sing it with conviction Samuel, I can feel that vocal, great mix also, ozone and neutron do well on this.
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Since you said... "I hope you like this song as much as I do. Let me know what you think."
...I'll give you my impressions straight up. I think you have a bunch of talent and I like a lot of your stuff. I wanted to like this (because of your introduction of it), but I think it "misses".
I listened before you answered LPMan - and figured that you were using the sweater to mean "her". I don't think it works, though. You personify the sweater from start to finish and never transition to "her" (I kept waiting for that to happen in the end). I think the main "problem" (I'm calling it a problem because it is to me. It may not be for anyone else) is it remains your sweater ("my sweater") from start to finish.
The "up and ran away" line brought to mind the classic image of a guys jeans being so dirty they could walk away on their own. It often sounds like the guy is getting a little kinky with a sweater. "I liked to hold it close on dark cold nights."
The line "It smelled so sweet like her perfume." only serves to further make it seem like it's the actual sweater your are talking about - since SHE would, of course, smell of her perfume (the "like" throws it back to the sweater).
"It had a smile that could light up the room." Makes it obvious that you are attempting to refer to HER and not the sweater, but, again, I get no transition to allow that payoff.
There are a number of good descriptive lines - all the way through. "little hole on the lower left side." "stick my finger inside." "a stitch on the right hand pocket." "It was grey. It went with anything." All good stuff.
But, overall, it did not work for me.
The instruments and the mix sound good. I thought the vocal sounded a bit "boxy". The vocal itself is good (yours always are), but I thought the processing did not quite fit the "sorrowful ballad" that this is. There are no "tails" - delay or reverb - that I would expect. That is, of course, a purely personal preference...
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Samuel, This version is very cool but I can hear an alternate. Let me just throw something out as a secondary take that would address what Floyd has outlined as a perspective/point of view issue. It is totally up to you as the artist to make that call though. If there is a perspective issue, try this: You could try a second, alternate approach with a simple shift in perspective and keep the metaphor intact. I will just be throwing out ideas, and feel free to keep what sticks. The music is great, but this might work as a skeleton for "Version 2." (If you are interested in further exploration.) V1 I miss her cashmere sweater and the things that she used to say I miss her sweet love letters and the.... I miss the... I miss the records that we used to play I miss the ... I miss the... Pre Chorus And when I said I couldn't live without her that's the day that she walked away And now I'm standing in the rain and miss her I can't believe that we've been washed way CH And every day I dream of ways to go get her cause all I have is yesterday and as many holes as that cashmere sweater the one that she just threw away just threw away just threw away or something like that I am just typing man. anyway you can keep mentioning the cashmere sweater but list all the other things you miss, and talk about how much you love the sweater, but she actually threw it away, it means everything to you but nothing to her I think if you can pull that off it would be absolutely heartbreaking and have major hit potential. On production, don't go too crazy with all those new toys now. This song is about mid range and wood ...keep it warm as, well, a cashmere sweater. Hope that was helpful. Use any of those ideas that are helpful and throw the rest away. Again, totally love the originality of the original. This could just be a different way to explore the metaphor. Love your stuff man.
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Love the outside the square lyrics Samuel. Good song and as always great production. Rob
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Thanks Floyd and David for your detailed replies. This is by no means meant to be a "hit song". It's just a cheesy bittersweet love song that for some reason I love. Maybe because it's very different from what I usually write. However it's not meant to be taken literal. For me it works and I think trying to change it would personally make me like it less.
On the technical side there may be something I could do better with the vocals to warm them up. Just not sure what. Maybe I'll revisit it next week.
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Like I said Samuel, I think the first version is really really cool. Maybe we can save some of that stuff I typed up and do another song together as a collab called my old jacket.
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Sounds like a plan David.
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Sounds like a plan David.
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Glad Neutron and Ozone are working out for you! What reverb are you using on the vocal...don't think I saw a mention of that.
We always enjoy the emotion/soul that comes through on your vocals and this does not disappoint.
Nice RT choice...like the bowed bass.
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Glad Neutron and Ozone are working out for you! What reverb are you using on the vocal...don't think I saw a mention of that.
J&B I used Reverb SOLO by Acon Digital. I believe it is free. You have one big knob to control room size and a slider to control dry/wet amount. Since I put it on an FX send I set it all the way to wet and controlled the level with the send amount and FX slider. There is also a snapback delay on a separate FX send that is controlled the same way. I used the built in delay that comes with Cubase for that.
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Back for another listen to this song!!!, better and better each time.
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