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#477727 - 06/14/18 10:01 AM [User Showcase] Re: NEW Original Song "Second Thoughts" [Re: dcuny]
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Originally Posted By: dcuny
I enjoyed the listen. The song has a strong Gordon Lightfoot vibe, both in your vocal delivery, the chord changes, and the guitars. That's a good thing.

Since you said all comments are welcome, I'll stupidly broach the usually taboo criticism of lyrics, and note that the first verse plays the pronoun game:

Failed to cry when it broke my heart
That doesn't mean it's not tearing me apart


In my 100% non-expert songwriting opinion, using nouns would give stronger lyrics:

Failed to cry when you broke my heart
That doesn't mean love's not tearing me apart


Of course, I've got zero number one hits, so what do I know? laugh

Anyway, nice song - thanks for posting!



Hey David, thanks for the thoughtful reply. I agree with your opinion on the noun/pronoun issue, and had I thought of it before I completed the song I probably would have changed it... However I'm also of the opinion that when it come to songwriting those rules really don't matter. wink By the way I have the same amount of #1 hits as you! grin


Originally Posted By: F.M.M.
hi Achordocaste love this lightfoot old humble pie sixties seventies feel however modern great work greg,cathy thanks for sharing eric



F.M.M., Thank you for the nice words and the listen.


Originally Posted By: Rob4580
Good song and well mixed. Sounds early seventies and that's a good thing to me.
Credit both of you.Rob.



Thanks Rob. Interesting to me how so many hear the early '70's sounds... since that's not something I was consciously trying to do.

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#477729 - 06/14/18 10:24 AM [User Showcase] Re: NEW Original Song "Second Thoughts" [Re: Achordocaster]
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Big time Gordon Lightfoot feel to the song. Loved the tremolo guitar and vibe of the whole tune. Loved the Tele licks during the "La La's". Very nicely done. Enjoyed it.

Dave

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#479426 - 06/26/18 10:09 AM [User Showcase] Re: NEW Original Song "Second Thoughts" [Re: GocartMoz]
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Originally Posted By: GocartMoz
Big time Gordon Lightfoot feel to the song. Loved the tremolo guitar and vibe of the whole tune. Loved the Tele licks during the "La La's". Very nicely done. Enjoyed it.

Dave


Hey Dave, I certainly appreciate the listen and the very kind comments.

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#479443 - 06/26/18 12:18 PM [User Showcase] Re: NEW Original Song "Second Thoughts" [Re: Achordocaster]
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Most enjoyable song, thanks for sharing

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#479591 - 06/27/18 02:55 PM [User Showcase] Re: NEW Original Song "Second Thoughts" [Re: Achordocaster]
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Really nice song - arrangement and track choices. The guitar work speaks for itself (it's really good!). And if I had a voice even half that good - sigh!

Used to live in Denver - got to Grand Junction a couple of time.

You and Kathy did a terrific job with this. The la-las near the end were great!

Alan
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#479636 - 06/27/18 07:29 PM [User Showcase] Re: NEW Original Song "Second Thoughts" [Re: floyd jane]
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Originally Posted By: floyd jane
Greg & Kathy,

A really nice song. Sounds like an old favorite...

Excellent arrangement and mix. Nice vocals and harmony.

Nice.

fj


Floyd pretty much nailed my sentiments on this one. Real nice!

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#481099 - 07/09/18 09:14 AM [User Showcase] Re: NEW Original Song "Second Thoughts" [Re: furry]
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Originally Posted By: furry
Most enjoyable song, thanks for sharing


Hey Graham thanks for the listen.


Originally Posted By: Al-David
Really nice song - arrangement and track choices. The guitar work speaks for itself (it's really good!). And if I had a voice even half that good - sigh!

Used to live in Denver - got to Grand Junction a couple of time.

You and Kathy did a terrific job with this. The la-las near the end were great!

Alan


Thanks for the very kind comments Alan. Kathy & I appreciate It.


Originally Posted By: Steve Young
Originally Posted By: floyd jane
Greg & Kathy,

A really nice song. Sounds like an old favorite...

Excellent arrangement and mix. Nice vocals and harmony.

Nice.

fj


Floyd pretty much nailed my sentiments on this one. Real nice!

Steve


Thanks for the listen Steve... And agreeing with Floyd. grin

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#481169 - 07/09/18 08:05 PM [User Showcase] Re: NEW Original Song "Second Thoughts" [Re: Achordocaster]
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Very nice guitars and lyrics. Everything mixed to perfection. Great!
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#481179 - 07/10/18 02:22 AM [User Showcase] Re: NEW Original Song "Second Thoughts" [Re: Achordocaster]
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As has been said Gordon Lightfoot feel defo.


Nice production vocals, lyrics, tracks.


One to be proud of.
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#481199 - 07/10/18 06:38 AM [User Showcase] Re: NEW Original Song "Second Thoughts" [Re: Achordocaster]
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You nailed this one! It sounds sincere and lush, and the vocal delivery is powerful on this one. There are some really nice thought provoking lyrics here as well which helped push it along for me. That aside, it is quite catchy and has a wonderful groove.

Nothing I'd change here - thanks so much for sharing smile
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#482883 - 07/22/18 08:33 AM [User Showcase] Re: NEW Original Song "Second Thoughts" [Re: EMG]
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Originally Posted By: EMG
Very nice guitars and lyrics. Everything mixed to perfection. Great!


Hey EMG. Thanks for the listen & nice comments.


Originally Posted By: beatmaster
As has been said Gordon Lightfoot feel defo.


Nice production vocals, lyrics, tracks.


One to be proud of.


Thanks beatmaster, I am proud of it.


Originally Posted By: Deryk - PG Music
You nailed this one! It sounds sincere and lush, and the vocal delivery is powerful on this one. There are some really nice thought provoking lyrics here as well which helped push it along for me. That aside, it is quite catchy and has a wonderful groove.

Nothing I'd change here - thanks so much for sharing smile


Well thank you Deryk, Kathy & I very much appreciate your kind words.


Edited by Achordocaster (07/22/18 08:37 AM)

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#536644 - 05/14/19 07:22 AM [User Showcase] Re: NEW Original Song "Second Thoughts" [Re: Achordocaster]
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Well written song! Lyrics also!

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#536962 - 05/16/19 11:25 AM [User Showcase] Re: NEW Original Song "Second Thoughts" [Re: Myriopod]
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Originally Posted By: Myriopod
Well written song! Lyrics also!


Thank you for the listen and the nice comments.
I'm hoping to have something new in the near future.

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#536969 - 05/16/19 01:55 PM [User Showcase] Re: NEW Original Song "Second Thoughts" [Re: Achordocaster]
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I got a Gordon Lightfoot feel from your singing, the kind of voice that makes any song better. Banjo was soft but effective. Nice job all the way around.
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#537318 - 05/19/19 11:28 AM [User Showcase] Re: NEW Original Song "Second Thoughts" [Re: TuneMonger]
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Originally Posted By: TuneMonger
I got a Gordon Lightfoot feel from your singing, the kind of voice that makes any song better. Banjo was soft but effective. Nice job all the way around.


Thanks TuneMonger. You're not the first with The GL comparison. I appreciate the listen and the compliment.

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