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Another new one. As usual, haven't quite been able to get a handle on backing vocals yet, if any. Thanks for listening.

BRING ME DOWN TO THE WATER
(c)2018 David S. Becker Music
All Rights Reserved

https://soundcloud.com/gocartmoz/bring-me-down-to-the-water

INTRO
VERSE 1

Bring me down to the water
Hold my head down 'til the water turns to black
Wash away my transgressions
Cleanse my soul and my stone cold heart
Please erase the bad memories
Lead the way to a brand new start
Before my world is ripped apart

VERSE 2
I was born in the badlands
Trained by the belt and a cold steel fist
I learned to take what I wanted
Kill or be killed was my guiding creed
There was no God there to save me
Just a will and an urge to deceive
And a hunger i had to feed

CHORUS
They don't offer absolution
For a hardened man like me
I've spent far too many years
Inside a penitentiary
I wish that I felt something
I wish that I would care
They can lead me to the water
They can lead me to that chair

INSTRUMENTAL
VERSE 3

It was a searing day in August
I stood lookout at the Black Hills Bank
A man in blue came upon me
"Hands in the air," he yelled and shots rang out
I watched him bleed out on the sidewalk
Now my freedom is in doubt
"Go to hell," his widow shouts

VERSE 4
It's certain hell is where I'm going
I meet Old Sparky in just one week's time
So bring me down to the water
Immerse my body let me free my mind
I'm not seeking absolution
Just repentance for my crimes
Bring me now there's not much time

CHORUS
OUTRO


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Style - _CROK125.STY: Classic Rock w/Held 12 String
Key - BM
BPM - 120

Bass - 366, Electric, Country Ev 065
Organ - 686, B3, Background Pop Ev120
Drums - Real Drums-NashvilleEven16^1=a Sidekick, HiHat, b Snare, Ride
Guitar - 1002, 12-String Acoustic, Rhythm Classic RockA-B Ev16 065
I had a mandolin solo track and mando rhythm track which I rendered then lost. I don't recall the names of the files.

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David,

This is first rate.

From the moment you started singing I was a captive of the lyrics. Your storytelling and the way you presented it is fantastic. The groove and the instruments you chose to frame your words and drive your song were perfect.

I found verse 1 really powerful. You vividly set the scene for what was to unfold.

Quote:
Bring me down to the water
Hold my head down 'til the water turns to black
Wash away my transgressions
Cleanse my soul and my stone cold heart
Please erase the bad memories
Lead the way to a brand new start
Before my world is ripped apart


That X X X A X A A rhyme scheme truly is a brilliant choice for having the lyrics gallop forward with energy, power and momentum. To my ears, the pièce de ré·sis·tance was that last line. I did not anticipate it's rhyme and it left me hanging there, waiting for more. For me, you created the same effect with rhyme as what musicians do when they use what's called an interrupted cadence.

From start to finish I was in the grip of your music and your singing.

Wow!

All the best,
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Liked a lot.


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Originally Posted By: Noel96
David,

This is first rate.

From the moment you started singing I was a captive of the lyrics. Your storytelling and the way you presented it is fantastic. The groove and the instruments you chose to frame your words and drive your song were perfect.

I found verse 1 really powerful. You vividly set the scene for what was to unfold.

Quote:
Bring me down to the water
Hold my head down 'til the water turns to black
Wash away my transgressions
Cleanse my soul and my stone cold heart
Please erase the bad memories
Lead the way to a brand new start
Before my world is ripped apart


That X X X A X A A rhyme scheme truly is a brilliant choice for having the lyrics gallop forward with energy, power and momentum. To my ears, the pièce de ré·sis·tance was that last line. I did not anticipate it's rhyme and it left me hanging there, waiting for more. For me, you created the same effect with rhyme as what musicians do when they use what's called an interrupted cadence.

From start to finish I was in the grip of your music and your singing.

Wow!

All the best,
Noel



Thx so much for the listen and comments Noel. I really appreciate your time and thoughts.

Dave

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Wow - I thoroughly enjoyed this. It reminds me of stuff by the Highwaymen back in the 80's. I'm loving the lyrics here, and your delivery of them is perfectly sincere. The groove is fantastic too, and the production is nice and crisp. I wouldn't bat an eyelash hearing this on the radio.

Great work and thanks for sharing smile


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Wow. Awesome. A movie in a song!!

Great job.

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I was born in the badlands
Trained by the belt and a cold steel fist

I love this line, expresses so much about Father/son relationship

to me the lyrics have a toughness like Springsteen or Isbell might write

love the mandolin, sounds great and fits well

great storytelling and singing

enjoyed

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Originally Posted By: EMG
Liked a lot.


Thx much for giving this a spin EMG.

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Well done! The change at the bridge really got my attention. The mandolin break was unexpected, and very cool. Loved the stop at "...to the chair".

Now my freedom is in doubt

Perhaps a bit of an understatement? wink

Very enjoyable!


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Dave,

A cool, dark story. The song has a terrific pace.

Very nice production and a good mix.

As David noted - the stop at the end is really nice...

You are putting the BAND to good use!

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Originally Posted By: Deryk - PG Music
Wow - I thoroughly enjoyed this. It reminds me of stuff by the Highwaymen back in the 80's. I'm loving the lyrics here, and your delivery of them is perfectly sincere. The groove is fantastic too, and the production is nice and crisp. I wouldn't bat an eyelash hearing this on the radio.

Great work and thanks for sharing smile


Thanks for listening and commenting Derek. Much appreciated.

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Originally Posted By: David Snyder

Wow. Awesome. A movie in a song!!

Great job.


Thx for giving it a listen David. Much appreciated.

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Dave,

Very dramatic story,well told, sung and produced.
Noel already highlighted the first verse which is terrific ( and in some ways as much the centre of the song as the chorus).
Excellent!

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Originally Posted By: 44kfl

I was born in the badlands
Trained by the belt and a cold steel fist

I love this line, expresses so much about Father/son relationship

to me the lyrics have a toughness like Springsteen or Isbell might write

love the mandolin, sounds great and fits well

great storytelling and singing

enjoyed

Kenny


Thank you Kenny. Springsteen has been my favorite musical artist since I was a kid. So anytime his name is mentioned, it is much appreciated. Thanks for taking the time to give this a listen.

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Hi David,

This is a most fascinating song.
We like every part of it. The music (also the "nameless" mandolins :D), your vocals, the lyrics.
It immediately captivated us.
Great song!

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Originally Posted By: dcuny
Well done! The change at the bridge really got my attention. The mandolin break was unexpected, and very cool. Loved the stop at "...to the chair".

Now my freedom is in doubt

Perhaps a bit of an understatement? wink

Very enjoyable!


An understatement indeed. Thank you very much for the listen and comments. They are greatly appreciated.

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Man, what a great song!

One of the best songs I have ever heard on this site actually, excellent write and performance.

Well done!

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+1 on what Noel said. Very cool vocal. Super backtrack. The picking on the acoustic was really cool. Well done..


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WOW this is a great story and well as a great mix, vocal and lyrics.

Your groove is super.

I really liked this!


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Hi, David !:))

Echoeing what others have already
said this is phenomenal in every
aspect ! I´m in awe yes I am !

Congrats to this masterpiece of yours !

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