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You Don't Serve Me Anymore

This is my entry for the Xtra style Pak 5 song contest in jazz category. The style is _SMOOTHY, and I have used also Vocal Oohs and organ realtracks. Well, this is more like a soul tune than jazz, and those great organ parts BIAB created for me are true blues.

The melody is bit out of my vocal range, but I tried my best I wish I could find a more soulful vocalist for this.

Style is _SMOOTHY.STY (Smoothie Soul and Smooth Ballad)
Category: Jazz

RealTracks in style: 908:Bass, Electric, SmoothBallad Ev16 065
RealTracks in style: 2808:Piano, Acoustic, Rhythm SoulfulPop16thsMike Ev16 065 Reverb 20
RealTracks in style: 1072:Guitar, Electric, Rhythm SmoothJazzBallad Ev16 065 Reverb 75
RealTracks in style: 1543:Synth Pad, PopBelieve Ev16 065 Reverb 120
RealDrums in style: SmoothJazzBallad^3-a:Sidestick, HiHat , b:Sidestick, Ride Reverb 60

RealTracks in song: 1656:Organ, Soloist Bossa Ev 085
RealTracks in song: 673:Organ, B3, Background Blues BB Ev 085
RealTracks in song: 3064:Vocal Oohs, Rhythm Pop3-part Ev 085

Vocals: Janne S
Mixed in Sonar Platinum

Lyrics:

You filled my mug of life with foam
but happy hours are long gone
you made me feel like I am home
now how am I supposed to go on?
Cooling stream of sparkling joy
from the vessel of your heart
I could enjoy bites of kindness
you were serving a la carte.

It's been a long time since your last call
it's hard to swallow the aftertaste, the bitter fall
you don't serve me anymore
you don't serve me anymore.

Your stout embrace intoxicating
an age-old spirit that made me strong
you let me be a vulnerable
uncertain man, you let me belong.
please forgive if I have been
heavy-handed or too loud
or was I just drinking too much
to be stranded and shut out?

It's been a long time...

I have many stories to tell
but there is no one who listens to
life on the rocks, living through hell
like you did for years before
but you don't serve me anymore.

I was an actor in your play
but my glass is empty now
you have got what you wished from me
it's my time to take a bow.
Just for good and old times' sake
could I get a final round?
I will accept it's my last shout
and then I'll leave you chances downed.

It's been a long time...

Your door is closed
I'm out on the streets, exposed
the shadows of my past on my heels
an unwelcome man, that's how life feels.

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Janne

Janne,

Very nice. Cool chord changes throughout... I like your vocal - well recorded.

A good arrangement. A really nice mix. everything clear and in a good place. the drums sound great... the organ, too...

Enjoyed that.

fj

Hi., Janne !:))


This must be your best
so far, at least of those
I have been able to listen
to !

Superb progressions !

Cheers
Dani

A real Janne song again. We recognize the change of chords and the type of lyrics.
Your vocals are at their best in the chorus, sound great there.

Rob and Anne-Marie

Janne

Nice use of the style. A good composition with interesting changes and a nice arrangement.
Good luck in the competition.

Peter

Very enjoyable song Janne. Very cool chord changes. Well done.

A great refreshing sound

interesting write, very creative

awesome sounding organ

enjoyed the listen

Kenny

Thanks Floyd, I really appreciate your kind feedback Most of those kind words should be directed to BIAB, realtracks and that Xtra style. They are so good I didn't have to do much mixing work.

Janne

Thanks Dani for your kind comment I'm honored to hear you think this is my best I'm quite happy with the progression, that piano sounds great with it, I'm glad you liked it too

Janne

Clever write.

Thanks Rob and Anne-Marie for your kind feedback Very good to know I have a recognizable style, I have thought that I don't have one I agree with the vocals, I use doubling in the chorus, maybe I should use it also in the verses to soften my voice.

Janne

Thanks Peter for listening, kindly commenting and for the good luck wish

Janne

Janne, Floyd said what I was thinking! You always do a very good job with your songs! Thanks, Torrey

Yes, very interesting musical changes, and the production is stellar!! Love the metaphorical writing....extremely creative! Great job with everything!! Take care. Greg

I really enjoyed the chord progression and the ambience supplied by the organ in the background. Very unique sound to this,

Dave

Nice work Janne, nice changes, beautifully engineered.

John

Hello, Janne

Very unique chord progression!
Your characteristics are expressed almost exactly.
The melody is a little sad.
I like the sad point of your melodies.
Enjoyed my listen a lot.
Good luck in the competition.

Best regards.

Shigeki Adachi

Thanks Scott, I appreciate your kind words

Janne

Thanks Kenny for your kind words I agree, that organ is awesome, always nice to find some great sounding BIAB instruments which I haven't paid attention before.

Janne

Thanks David

Janne