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#486174 - 08/16/18 04:08 PM
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Bring Me Down To The Water
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Another new one. As usual, haven't quite been able to get a handle on backing vocals yet, if any. Thanks for listening. BRING ME DOWN TO THE WATER(c)2018 David S. Becker Music All Rights Reserved https://soundcloud.com/gocartmoz/bring-me-down-to-the-waterINTRO
VERSE 1Bring me down to the water Hold my head down 'til the water turns to black Wash away my transgressions Cleanse my soul and my stone cold heart Please erase the bad memories Lead the way to a brand new start Before my world is ripped apart VERSE 2I was born in the badlands Trained by the belt and a cold steel fist I learned to take what I wanted Kill or be killed was my guiding creed There was no God there to save me Just a will and an urge to deceive And a hunger i had to feed CHORUSThey don't offer absolution For a hardened man like me I've spent far too many years Inside a penitentiary I wish that I felt something I wish that I would care They can lead me to the water They can lead me to that chair INSTRUMENTAL
VERSE 3It was a searing day in August I stood lookout at the Black Hills Bank A man in blue came upon me "Hands in the air," he yelled and shots rang out I watched him bleed out on the sidewalk Now my freedom is in doubt "Go to hell," his widow shouts VERSE 4It's certain hell is where I'm going I meet Old Sparky in just one week's time So bring me down to the water Immerse my body let me free my mind I'm not seeking absolution Just repentance for my crimes Bring me now there's not much time CHORUS
OUTROThe Band:Style - _CROK125.STY: Classic Rock w/Held 12 String Key - BM BPM - 120 Bass - 366, Electric, Country Ev 065 Organ - 686, B3, Background Pop Ev120 Drums - Real Drums-NashvilleEven16^1=a Sidekick, HiHat, b Snare, Ride Guitar - 1002, 12-String Acoustic, Rhythm Classic RockA-B Ev16 065 I had a mandolin solo track and mando rhythm track which I rendered then lost. I don't recall the names of the files.
Edited by GocartMoz (08/16/18 04:39 PM)
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#486210 - 08/17/18 01:01 AM
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Re: Bring Me Down To The Water
[Re: GocartMoz]
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David, This is first rate. From the moment you started singing I was a captive of the lyrics. Your storytelling and the way you presented it is fantastic. The groove and the instruments you chose to frame your words and drive your song were perfect. I found verse 1 really powerful. You vividly set the scene for what was to unfold. Bring me down to the water
Hold my head down 'til the water turns to black
Wash away my transgressions
Cleanse my soul and my stone cold heart
Please erase the bad memories
Lead the way to a brand new start
Before my world is ripped apart That X X X A X A A rhyme scheme truly is a brilliant choice for having the lyrics gallop forward with energy, power and momentum. To my ears, the pièce de ré·sis·tance was that last line. I did not anticipate it's rhyme and it left me hanging there, waiting for more. For me, you created the same effect with rhyme as what musicians do when they use what's called an interrupted cadence. From start to finish I was in the grip of your music and your singing. Wow! All the best, Noel
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#486212 - 08/17/18 01:33 AM
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Re: Bring Me Down To The Water
[Re: GocartMoz]
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Liked a lot.
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#486229 - 08/17/18 05:07 AM
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Re: Bring Me Down To The Water
[Re: Noel96]
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David, This is first rate. From the moment you started singing I was a captive of the lyrics. Your storytelling and the way you presented it is fantastic. The groove and the instruments you chose to frame your words and drive your song were perfect. I found verse 1 really powerful. You vividly set the scene for what was to unfold. Bring me down to the water
Hold my head down 'til the water turns to black
Wash away my transgressions
Cleanse my soul and my stone cold heart
Please erase the bad memories
Lead the way to a brand new start
Before my world is ripped apart That X X X A X A A rhyme scheme truly is a brilliant choice for having the lyrics gallop forward with energy, power and momentum. To my ears, the pièce de ré·sis·tance was that last line. I did not anticipate it's rhyme and it left me hanging there, waiting for more. For me, you created the same effect with rhyme as what musicians do when they use what's called an interrupted cadence. From start to finish I was in the grip of your music and your singing. Wow! All the best, Noel Thx so much for the listen and comments Noel. I really appreciate your time and thoughts. Dave
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#486244 - 08/17/18 07:40 AM
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Re: Bring Me Down To The Water
[Re: GocartMoz]
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Wow - I thoroughly enjoyed this. It reminds me of stuff by the Highwaymen back in the 80's. I'm loving the lyrics here, and your delivery of them is perfectly sincere. The groove is fantastic too, and the production is nice and crisp. I wouldn't bat an eyelash hearing this on the radio. Great work and thanks for sharing 
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#486257 - 08/17/18 09:08 AM
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Re: Bring Me Down To The Water
[Re: GocartMoz]
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Wow. Awesome. A movie in a song!!
Great job.
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#486258 - 08/17/18 09:08 AM
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Re: Bring Me Down To The Water
[Re: GocartMoz]
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I was born in the badlands
Trained by the belt and a cold steel fist
I love this line, expresses so much about Father/son relationship
to me the lyrics have a toughness like Springsteen or Isbell might write
love the mandolin, sounds great and fits well
great storytelling and singing
enjoyed
Kenny
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#486283 - 08/17/18 11:52 AM
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Re: Bring Me Down To The Water
[Re: EMG]
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Thx much for giving this a spin EMG. Dave
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#486285 - 08/17/18 12:05 PM
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Re: Bring Me Down To The Water
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Well done! The change at the bridge really got my attention. The mandolin break was unexpected, and very cool. Loved the stop at "...to the chair". Now my freedom is in doubtPerhaps a bit of an understatement?  Very enjoyable!
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#486289 - 08/17/18 12:31 PM
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Re: Bring Me Down To The Water
[Re: GocartMoz]
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Dave,
A cool, dark story. The song has a terrific pace.
Very nice production and a good mix.
As David noted - the stop at the end is really nice...
You are putting the BAND to good use!
fj
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#486333 - 08/17/18 02:54 PM
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Re: Bring Me Down To The Water
[Re: Deryk - PG Music]
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Wow - I thoroughly enjoyed this. It reminds me of stuff by the Highwaymen back in the 80's. I'm loving the lyrics here, and your delivery of them is perfectly sincere. The groove is fantastic too, and the production is nice and crisp. I wouldn't bat an eyelash hearing this on the radio. Great work and thanks for sharing Thanks for listening and commenting Derek. Much appreciated. Dave
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#486362 - 08/17/18 06:47 PM
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Re: Bring Me Down To The Water
[Re: David Snyder]
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Wow. Awesome. A movie in a song!!
Great job.
Thx for giving it a listen David. Much appreciated. Dave
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#486363 - 08/17/18 06:49 PM
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Re: Bring Me Down To The Water
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Dave,
Very dramatic story,well told, sung and produced.
Noel already highlighted the first verse which is terrific ( and in some ways as much the centre of the song as the chorus).
Excellent!
Robert
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#486403 - 08/18/18 03:21 AM
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I was born in the badlands
Trained by the belt and a cold steel fist
I love this line, expresses so much about Father/son relationship
to me the lyrics have a toughness like Springsteen or Isbell might write
love the mandolin, sounds great and fits well
great storytelling and singing
enjoyed
Kenny
Thank you Kenny. Springsteen has been my favorite musical artist since I was a kid. So anytime his name is mentioned, it is much appreciated. Thanks for taking the time to give this a listen. Dave
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#486467 - 08/18/18 01:09 PM
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Re: Bring Me Down To The Water
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Hi David,
This is a most fascinating song.
We like every part of it. The music (also the "nameless" mandolins :D), your vocals, the lyrics.
It immediately captivated us.
Great song!
Rob and Anne-Marie
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#486556 - 08/19/18 04:38 AM
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Re: Bring Me Down To The Water
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Well done! The change at the bridge really got my attention. The mandolin break was unexpected, and very cool. Loved the stop at "...to the chair". Now my freedom is in doubtPerhaps a bit of an understatement? Very enjoyable! An understatement indeed. Thank you very much for the listen and comments. They are greatly appreciated. Dave
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#486558 - 08/19/18 05:34 AM
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Re: Bring Me Down To The Water
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Man, what a great song!
One of the best songs I have ever heard on this site actually, excellent write and performance.
Well done!
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#486608 - 08/19/18 09:15 AM
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Re: Bring Me Down To The Water
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+1 on what Noel said. Very cool vocal. Super backtrack. The picking on the acoustic was really cool. Well done..
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#486659 - 08/19/18 01:34 PM
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Re: Bring Me Down To The Water
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WOW this is a great story and well as a great mix, vocal and lyrics.
Your groove is super.
I really liked this!
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#486671 - 08/19/18 02:46 PM
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Hi, David !:))
Echoeing what others have already
said this is phenomenal in every
aspect ! I´m in awe yes I am !
Congrats to this masterpiece of yours !
Cheers
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