Page 1 of 2 1 2 >
You need to be logged in to post
Options
Index
#497155 - 10/22/18 11:09 AM [User Showcase] Show Me
Registered: 04/23/18
Posts: 774
Loc: Mill Valley, California USA
Deej56 Offline
Journeyman

Registered: 04/23/18
Posts: 774
Loc: Mill Valley, California USA
Hi, all:

Sorry I haven’t had an opportunity to post on this site recently. Just amazed at the great songs you all keep putting out. Anyway, this is a song I co-wrote with a talented writer named John Vaughn, and I’m really glad to have had the opportunity to work with him on this. I hope what we have is worth the listen, and thanks in advance for any feedback you may have.

Here's the song:

Show Me

(V) You should have seen it from the sadness on my face:
the yesterdays and tomorrows you erased,
as if the years didn’t mean that much to you,
and if it’s so I guess there’s nothing I can do

(C) But I’m still needing you to
show me just a little emotion.
Tell me what you said just isn’t true.
Hold me like you just can’t live without me.
What in the world is wrong with you?

(V) Now all that’s left is this bag of memories;
the shades of what I thought our love was meant to be;
and all the doubts that keep me thinking we’re not through.
So here am I reaching out my arms to you
(I’m reaching out to you)

(C) I’m just wanting you to
show me just a little emotion.
Tell me what you said just isn’t true.
Hold me like you just can’t live without me.
What in the world is wrong with you?
What in the world can I do?

(B) We’ve been here once before,
and I don’t wanna be here anymore;
There’s no good reason to go back again
I know I shouldn’t try and let it die—
but it wouldn’t change a thing.

(C) ’Cause I’m still needing you to
show me just a little emotion.
Tell me what you said just isn’t true.
Hold me like you just can’t live without me.
What in the world is wrong with you?
What in the world can I do
to save myself from you.
(Show me you)
(Show me you)
(Show me you)

Here’s “the band”:

Drums: Nashville Even 16^1 Side-Stick, Ride
Bass: Real 1162, Acoustic, CelticReel Ev 16 110
Guitar 1: Real 407 Guitar, Acoustic, Fingerpicking Ev 165
Guitar 2: Real 634 Guitar, Electric, Rhythm PopAmerican Muted Ev 120
Guitar 3: Real 406 Guitar, Acoustic, Strumming Ev 136
Guitar 4: Real 408 Guitar, Resonator, Background Allis Ev 120
Fiddle: Real 618, Background Allis Ev 120

Words and music by John Vaughn and DJ Lekich
(c)2018 John Vaughn and DJ Lekich

Top
#497183 - 10/22/18 02:48 PM [User Showcase] Re: Show Me [Re: Deej56]
Registered: 06/19/17
Posts: 2354
Loc: Victoria, BC
Ember - PG Music Offline
PG Music Staff

Registered: 06/19/17
Posts: 2354
Loc: Victoria, BC
Loved your use of RealTracks and really enjoyed the lyrics as well! Awesome job. Thanks for sharing!
_________________________
Cheers,
Ember

Top
#497239 - 10/22/18 09:03 PM [User Showcase] Re: Show Me [Re: Deej56]
Registered: 04/13/16
Posts: 2495
Loc: Stanwell Park NSW Australia
rayc Offline
Veteran

Registered: 04/13/16
Posts: 2495
Loc: Stanwell Park NSW Australia
Good melody and the voice is quite unique - in a good way.
It's probably but the drums seem to lean to one side away from the chugging guitar - or it may be that guitar is masking the drums a little on its side.
Cool song. Well done to both of you.
_________________________
Cheers
rayc
"What's so funny about peace, love & understanding?" - N.Lowe
Pop on over to The Recording Rebels for positive, honest commentary, critiques and support. https://therecordingrebels.com

Top
#497255 - 10/23/18 01:44 AM [User Showcase] Re: Show Me [Re: Deej56]
Registered: 11/30/07
Posts: 3440
Loc: Ontario, Canada
BlueAttitude Offline
Veteran

Registered: 11/30/07
Posts: 3440
Loc: Ontario, Canada
I like this!

Love your vocal, very emotive and unique. I enjoyed the lyrics too.

Good song, enjoyed the listen!

Top
#497275 - 10/23/18 06:05 AM [User Showcase] Re: Show Me [Re: Deej56]
Registered: 08/10/12
Posts: 8670
Loc: Florida
floyd jane Offline
Veteran

Registered: 08/10/12
Posts: 8670
Loc: Florida
Deej,

I really like the sound/production on this. It has a "different" texture than most things posted here. Nicely done.

Overall, the write is interesting, though I would question the line "What in the world is wrong with you?". In the scheme of the write - a plea to a lover who no longer seems interested - that you apparently want back - that line is confrontational and belligerent - certainly not a help to your cause. I found it very off-putting. The later line of "What in the world can I do?" is much more in line with the idea (with an implied "...to get you back"?. The "...to save myself from you" at the end also makes one wonder if this is a I-want-you-back song or a I'm-glad-to-be-rid-of-you song...

I enjoyed the overall sound of the song very much. Your vocal - as always - is a real stand out...

fj

Top
#497290 - 10/23/18 07:00 AM [User Showcase] Re: Show Me [Re: Deej56]
Registered: 02/15/17
Posts: 3291
Deryk - PG Music Offline
PG Music Staff

Registered: 02/15/17
Posts: 3291
What a tune! I thoroughly enjoyed your vocal delivery here, and the progressions are top notch. It is nicely catchy, and had a more modern feel than a lot of things on the showcase. Plus, the lyrics are really standout too.

Thanks for sharing smile
_________________________
Cheers,
Deryk

Top
#497293 - 10/23/18 07:46 AM [User Showcase] Re: Show Me [Re: Deej56]
Registered: 08/09/10
Posts: 4440
Loc: New York
rsdean Offline
Veteran

Registered: 08/09/10
Posts: 4440
Loc: New York
Deej,

Love the song and the vocal. Some really cool textures happening with the music as well...

Great mix and production.

Bob
_________________________
SoundCloud Tracks


Top
#497308 - 10/23/18 09:27 AM [User Showcase] Re: Show Me [Re: Deej56]
Registered: 11/19/12
Posts: 2360
Loc: Middletown, PA.
44kfl Offline
Veteran

Registered: 11/19/12
Posts: 2360
Loc: Middletown, PA.
Cool song

nice write (conflicts pointed out by floyd) maybe do a rewrite of that line

catchy song,

enjoyed the listen,

Kenny

Top
#497413 - 10/23/18 07:51 PM [User Showcase] Re: Show Me [Re: Deej56]
Registered: 04/23/18
Posts: 774
Loc: Mill Valley, California USA
Deej56 Offline
Journeyman

Registered: 04/23/18
Posts: 774
Loc: Mill Valley, California USA
Ember, BlueAttitude, Derek, Bob and Kenny:

Thanks to you all for giving this a listen and taking the time to comment. Glad it was worth the time and that you enjoyed it. It is a little bit of a different sound than most of my solo efforts, but was looking to do something a bit faster paced and the lyrics seemed to accommodate that. New BIAB ground for me, but looking to continue my education. Appreciate the support.

My best to each of you,

Deej

Top
#497414 - 10/23/18 07:52 PM [User Showcase] Re: Show Me [Re: rayc]
Registered: 04/23/18
Posts: 774
Loc: Mill Valley, California USA
Deej56 Offline
Journeyman

Registered: 04/23/18
Posts: 774
Loc: Mill Valley, California USA
rayc:

Thanks for the kind words and feedback on the production. I’ll have to go back and listen for that. It may be I’ve panned both too much to one side. Drums are my kryptonite . . . I just can never seem to find the right sound to fit the song (either too much snare, or too much high-hat, or just plain too much). It’s the one area I really need to get better at. Again, appreciate the comments.

All the best,

Deej

Top
#497415 - 10/23/18 07:52 PM [User Showcase] Re: Show Me [Re: floyd jane]
Registered: 04/23/18
Posts: 774
Loc: Mill Valley, California USA
Deej56 Offline
Journeyman

Registered: 04/23/18
Posts: 774
Loc: Mill Valley, California USA

Floyd,

Thanks for the thoughtful comments. I was curious how folks might react to that line, so not entirely unexpected. For what it’s worth, to me at least, it’s neither a “I want you back” nor a “I’m glad to be rid of you" song. I’d say it’s more a “I know I can’t get you back, there’s no good reason to get back together, but I can’t let it go because I still need something more from you” song. Maybe that simply doesn’t work for a song, or we’ve failed miserably at the attempt—and I’m not sure it solves your concern with the “What in the world . . . “ line.

Which is to say, I get and appreciate your comment, and we will definitely give it some more thought. Again, thanks for stopping in and sharing your thoughts. They are always really helpful.

Kindest regards,

Deej

Top
#497428 - 10/23/18 10:21 PM [User Showcase] Re: Show Me [Re: Deej56]
Registered: 09/27/10
Posts: 3614
Loc: Sacramento, California
dcuny Offline
Veteran

Registered: 09/27/10
Posts: 3614
Loc: Sacramento, California
First and foremost, I love the sound of the song, and that's 99% of it there.

But I'll agree with floydjane about the lyric - the singer demands that they be loved, and then says:

What in the world is wrong with you?
What in the world can I do
to save myself from you.


That sort of flushes away what little good will might be remaining for the singer. frown
_________________________
-- David Cuny
My virtual singer development blog

Vocal control, you say. Never heard of it. Is that some kind of ProTools thing?

Top
#497453 - 10/24/18 07:02 AM [User Showcase] Re: Show Me [Re: Deej56]
Registered: 08/21/18
Posts: 1158
Tangmo Offline
Expert

Registered: 08/21/18
Posts: 1158
Quietly driving backing lays the tension on and under this emotively delivered and well sung vocal. Really, really nice.

Couldn't help but read the comments on "the line", though I try to ignore other comments until I've formed my own "view". Here's the way I take it. He's talking to someone at the point of breakup who is clearly showing him "no emotion" in delivering the news. Yeah, I'd say there's something wrong with her...or at least wrong with THAT. From the singer's POV.

Besides, it doesn't HAVE to be heard as aggressive. "What in the world is wrong with you?' seems fitting if she is normally emotionally expressive--even concerned. And that's re-enforced by the next line...what can he do?

It's the next line near the end that is jarring...to save myself from you. If it had been at the beginning, he's lost it with me. But it comes near the end, and that's when realization and self-preservation starts to kick in. He's not repeating himself, he's changing the context. It's powerful because it stands out.

Who knows, scholars may be studying this lyric 20 years from now. smile

Tell your lyricist (I'm assuming that's your partner here) that Tangmo approves. At the very least, it's a line that engenders "thought", (and maybe even a wee bit of controversy on a music forum) and that's not a bad thing at all. grin

Yeah, I like this a whole lot. Run with it. I think you have a hit.


Edited by Tangmo (10/24/18 07:54 AM)
_________________________
BIAB 2020 Audiophile. Windows 10 64bit. Songwriter, lyricist, composer(?) loving all styles. Some pre-BIAB music from Farfetched Tangmo Band's first CD. https://alonetone.com/tangmo/playlists/close-to-the-ground

Top
#497467 - 10/24/18 07:46 AM [User Showcase] Re: Show Me [Re: Deej56]
Registered: 12/05/11
Posts: 9404
Loc: GA USA
Janice & Bud Offline
Veteran

Registered: 12/05/11
Posts: 9404
Loc: GA USA
Hey, it's cool to hear another production from you!

You called in a very effective group of musicians to back your tune. Hat's off to them and you smile

Like Bob said there are some interesting attention grabbing textures happening with the tracks.

The melody and your vocal are instantly engaging...well done!

You mentioned to Ray "Drums are my kryptonite . . . I just can never seem to find the right sound to fit the song (either too much snare, or too much high-hat, or just plain too much). " If you haven't already a $29 investment in Waves CLA Drums might help. FWIW most folks here that have used it speak very highly of it as we do.

We most enjoyed this production!

J&B



Top
#497580 - 10/24/18 07:36 PM [User Showcase] Re: Show Me [Re: dcuny]
Registered: 04/23/18
Posts: 774
Loc: Mill Valley, California USA
Deej56 Offline
Journeyman

Registered: 04/23/18
Posts: 774
Loc: Mill Valley, California USA
David C.,

Thanks for chiming in and giving this one a listen. Glad the sound worked—again, new territory for me; just trying to challenge myself, do something different and learn more about BIAB. Still feel like (and am) a newbie. smile

As for the lyrics—I hear and understand. But check out Tangmo’s comments below and my response to him. We may have been too ambitious with the lyrics—and again, maybe it doesn’t work—but the intent was that this is more than a “I want us to get back together” song. That said, it just may not work; so we’ll keep tinkering.

Thanks again for stopping in!

All the best to you,

Deej

Top
#497581 - 10/24/18 07:38 PM [User Showcase] Re: Show Me [Re: Tangmo]
Registered: 04/23/18
Posts: 774
Loc: Mill Valley, California USA
Deej56 Offline
Journeyman

Registered: 04/23/18
Posts: 774
Loc: Mill Valley, California USA
Tangmo,

Well, I’ll start with a big thanks—I was starting to worry we totally missed the mark here. But your "scholarly analysis” of our lyrics is spot on. smirk When I first read John’s lyrics to this song, I was struck by some contrasting lines that suggested a conflicted point of view, so we went with that. Still, I worried about how “what’s wrong with you” might be perceived, though it’s intended as you describe. I added the “save myself” line, because we needed a seventh line in the last chorus to link to the close, but it seemed to fit for the reason you mention: self-realization—he’s screwed and by the end of the song he knows it.

All that said, John and I will keep debating changes—that’s what this forum is for. There’s a reason Hollywood studios play their films first to test audiences. If the audience doesn’t get what’s intended, what’s the point?

But I think we pretty much like the lyrics as they stand—and any changes we might make will likely be more tweaks than substantive revisions.

Thanks a ton for you input.

My kind regards,

Deej

Top
#497582 - 10/24/18 07:41 PM [User Showcase] Re: Show Me [Re: Janice & Bud]
Registered: 04/23/18
Posts: 774
Loc: Mill Valley, California USA
Deej56 Offline
Journeyman

Registered: 04/23/18
Posts: 774
Loc: Mill Valley, California USA
Janice & Bud,

Good to hear from you as well. I’ve been away from this board for too long. In part, I’m in a slump, and the one other new BIAB song I have needs more polishing before I have the courage to post it here. Really, seems like every song on this site is just killing it! Have to up my game.

I have done a couple of guitar/vocals—including another one with John—but those aren’t BIAB eligible, so . . . can’t post them here.

Thanks for the reference to Waves CLA Drums—I will definitely check it out. I just can’t understand why I always seem to get the psycho drummer who either wants to go all Keith Moon with the big drum rolls, or slap away at the high-hat like it’s the only part of the drum he’s allowed to hit! laugh

Hope all is well for you both,

Regards,

Deej

Top
#497731 - 10/25/18 03:25 PM [User Showcase] Re: Show Me [Re: Deej56]
Registered: 08/29/14
Posts: 5072
Loc: North Carolina
David Snyder Offline
Veteran

Registered: 08/29/14
Posts: 5072
Loc: North Carolina

DJ,

This is a great song. From start to finish. I love the energy, vocals, and lyrics and the progression.

An EXCELLENT write. Superb.

Just as an idea, I would love to hear a big rock production with this--big drums, and loud gritty guitars kicking in on V2. This is a song that could send a stadium up in flames if you were to turn up the heat a bit on an alternate mix.

Awesome songwriting man.
_________________________
David Snyder
Audiophile Everything + Studio + Instruments + Fingers
ASCAP, NSAI

www.davidsnydermusic.com
www.reverbnation.com/davidpsnyder
www.soundcloud.com/davidsnyderchannel
www.songtradr.com/user/profile/david.snyder







Top
#497741 - 10/25/18 05:21 PM [User Showcase] Re: Show Me [Re: Deej56]
Registered: 01/18/16
Posts: 1664
Joe -PG Music Offline
PG Music Staff

Registered: 01/18/16
Posts: 1664
Nice work Deej56, I really enjoyed the overall tone of this. Excellent mixdown on all of this and a solid key signature choice too. Excellent guitar riffs too. Adding the fiddle to this is a nice touch. Great done!
_________________________
Cheers,
Joe

Top
#497761 - 10/25/18 08:09 PM [User Showcase] Re: Show Me [Re: David Snyder]
Registered: 04/23/18
Posts: 774
Loc: Mill Valley, California USA
Deej56 Offline
Journeyman

Registered: 04/23/18
Posts: 774
Loc: Mill Valley, California USA
David S.,

Thanks much for the listen and feedback. You instincts on production are great, and I love your idea. I actually would have preferred a more pronounced driving drum on this production--something that could carry through and over the stops--but as I referenced above, I'm drum challenged, and just couldn't find anything that worked.

I like the idea of going big with this--just a little beyond my skill set right now. But maybe as I get more "fluent" in BIAB, John and I can put out a "rockier" version.

All the best to you, David.

Deej

Top
Page 1 of 2 1 2 >


PG Music News
The Guitar & Piano Chord Dictionary Programs

Happy National Dictionary Day!*

Head to our Other Windows Software page to find programs like PowerTracks, GuitarStar: Brent Mason Country, Video Guitar Lessons, and more!

Scroll down and you'll find our Guitar Chord Dictionary & Piano Chord Dictionary programs. Each Chord Dictionary allows you to choose a root note to select the chord you want to learn, and it will be displayed on-screen with either the piano keyboard or the guitar fretboard!

In the Guitar Chord Dictionary & Piano Chord Dictionary you can change the sounds within the Settings window, whether it be the Root note or the Chord, and it doesn't even have to be a guitar or piano! Looking through the options, there's various piano choices, guitar choices, organ, etc. - but you can also choose more unique sounds like the tuba, saxophone, trumpet, clarinet, and more!

*October 16th

Band-in-a-Box® Video Testimonial by C. Dan Roberts

Our latest Video Testimonial comes from C. Dan Roberts, and his enthusiasm for Band-in-a-Box® is inspiring!

Watch the video...

Do you have a video testimonial that you would like to share? Contact us at marketing@pgmusic.com.

Visit C. Dan Roberts testimonial page here.

Train Your Brain with Band-in-a-Box®

Today* is National Train Your Brain Day!

You can definitely do that with Band-in-a-Box®

Open your Band-in-a-Box® program, and you'll find the [Practice] button in the toolbar - it's a GREAT resource!
Minimized your toolbar? Head to Window | Practice Window or ALT SHIFT L to access.

In this window, you'll find many options to help you practice, including Ear Training games (Pitch Invasion is my favorite!), access to the Chord Builder and Chord Subs, some helpful tools within the Playalong Features menu (like Trade 4s, woodshed tempo, etc.), and more!

Train Your Brain with Band-in-a-Box® today!

Resources:
Windows Online Manual: Practice Window
Mac Online Manual: Tools, Wizards, Tutors, and Fun

*October 13

Band-in-a-Box® 2020 Updates for Windows & Mac!

We've just released FREE Updates for both Band-in-a-Box® 2020 for Windows & Mac program users!

With the latest update for Band-in-a-Box® 2020 for Windows, you can now choose the "Save Exact Chord Text" checkbox to the Save XML dialog, there are VST feature updates, Audio Chord Wizard enhancements, updated program messages, we've applied fixes to an assortment of user-reported issues, and the DAW Plugin 2.12.15 Update has been added too!

Review the complete list of updates for build 734 and download it here.

The newest Band-in-a-Box® 2020 for Mac update also includes VST feature updates, as well as RealTracks & RealDrums Picker enhancements, smoother 'tabbing' between dialog windows, and additional fixes applied to an assortment of user-reported issues. If you missed adding the DAW Plugin 2.12.15 update from September, it will be added with this update too!

Review the complete list of updates for build 420 and download it here.

Video - How to Transpose a Region of a Band-in-a-Box® Song

Want to learn how to transpose just one chorus of your Band-in-a-Box® song?

Check out our latest video, shared to the I want a video that shows me how to... forum: https://youtu.be/XiMrgtQ7u14

Band-in-a-Box® - What People Are Saying...

Wow, check out the latest feedback from Band-in-a-Box® users!

"I have one song I've been torturing over to get the sound right for quite some time and I merely keyed in the chords and what BB generated is awesome. Just what I hoped that song would sound like. What had taken me months to get right (and couldn't), the program could do in about an hour - AMAZING!"

"Great Ear Training Exercises! And I love that that you can set the tempo to whatever you choose. It's great for learning a tune!"

"A very good and easy to use musical program!"

"It's amazingly easy to use! Write a song? No problem! Add background sound track to a video? No problem! Put notes on a staff and have BB make up a chord progression and tell what key you are in? No problem! Start with a chord progression and have BB make a melody line? No problem!"

"Still the best practice tool I have found, great for running lines, improvising over and really helpful for working on song writing ideas as well! Good for beginners, and the more musical skill and knowledge you have the more you will get out of the software."

"I create demo songs with Band-in-a-Box, it helps me to get my ideas across to my engineer!"

"Been using Band-in-a-Box for years. Outstanding product from a great company!"

"It's like buying a Musical History Jukebox. It comes with probably 3000 styles and is like hiring session musicians to play rhythm with you, they even have soloists! It introduces you to so many types of rhythms that you other wise would know nothing about. "

"Paul McCartney said you gotta have a great band behind you. Well, Band-in-a-Box is my band."

"It's as easy as typing in the chords, choosing your style, instruments, etc., and off you go! Learning the tune? You can slow it down while you work on it then speed it up. My favorite analogy is a good chess program, which will play at your speed and level and is eternally patient!"

"I love my Band in a box, it does so much! Besides all the RealTracks and song ideas, it's a great tool to stay sharp with your licks. Social distancing got you down? Can't jam with friends? Pick out any song and go to the mixer button, there you can mute any instrument that's playing so you can jump right in and play along!"

"I love it. I'm a drummer, and Band-in-a-Box really keeps me on my toes!"

"The DAW plugin is really great. Trust me on this. I use it with Studio One.

"This is how I've been able to gig solo for the past 20 years. Band-in-a-Box is the great equalizer for us none rhythm players."

"Wouldn't want to be without it! One of the best things I bought in my life. Simple as that."

"As a songwriter I really love to work with Band-in-a-Box. The only limitation is your own creativity."

"I've used Band-in-a-Box for 25 years and thanks to this program and the advice of PG Music staff I've written over 100 songs. It's great software and amazing help to me as a musician. CONGRATS!!!"

Thank you for all the amazing feedback!

Band-in-a-Box® - A Teaching Tool!

Did you know that we offer Band-in-a-Box® LabPAK and Site License purchase options for schools? This is an ideal option for any educational institution looking to add Band-in-a-Box® to their curriculum.

Learn more about the LabPAK purchase options here: Windows | Mac.

How would a teacher use Band-in-a-Box® in a school setting?

A few ideas:
-practice sight reading with the students by following the on-screen notation
-display the Guitar Fretboard or Big Piano Window to watch the notes being played
-Trading fours! (etc.)
-generate a song for accompaniment during practice sessions
-create a practice song and save it as an audio file to send home with the student for additional practice!

...and more!

Wondering how to add a Band-in-a-Box LabPAK to your school? Feel free to contact us directly with any questions you might have! Click here to send us an email.

Forum Stats
33032 Members
68 Forums
66526 Topics
565645 Posts

Max Online: 2537 @ 01/19/20 07:09 AM
Newest Members
apollo_synth, ademtrottrid, sally908, Howard B, Jerome Hubbard

33032 Registered Users
Top Posters (30 Days)
CaptainMoto 161
Janice & Bud 136
eddie1261 126
Al-David 126
VideoTrack 113
Planobilly 110
floyd jane 97
Pipeline 96
MarioD 77
Simon - PG Music 76
Today's Birthdays
GuernseyCove, tzee68