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#501912 - 11/17/18 08:23 PM
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Hi folks. Here is another pacifist song I wrote. Lyrics are a bit rough. It drained a lot of my energy, so for now, I will let it be "as is", not to make things worse  Most likely I will try to re-record / remix this in future, so critical comments are very welcomed. Thank you for listening! Misha. Put Away That Fire
I was working very chaotically and forgot to write down some BIAB track names, the ones I know are present: Bass, Acoustic, PopWaltz Ev 085 Guitar, Acoustic, Rhythm Folkie16ths Sw16 085 RealDrums=PraiseWorshipSlow 16th Piano, Acoustic, Rhythm Tango Ev 100 Mandolin, Rhythm PopModernGrooveAndy Ev16 075 Cello, Background PopCountry Ev 085 Flute, Soloist, Bossa Ev 140 [double-time] style change to BeatBox.sty at choruses Lyrics: Days are burning like a tinder, Leaving ashes on a spotless, virgin snow. Sky is echoing a sad song of an egret While he flies to place he knows as home. Stop, turn around - put away that fire Tame your desires, like a wild horse. There so much pain and suffering In those faraway towns Sickness, famine and drought and endless war World is giant, live volcano, rage is flowing like a magma (lava, I know) to the sea Lies, like steam, are rising to the clouds Cover (shading?) sun for you and me Stop, turn around - put away that fire Tame your desires, like a wild horse. There so much pain and suffering In those faraway towns Sickness, famine and drought and endless war Russian verse, written in folk tradition: Ohh, the heavy thoughts, Grey bird of unhappiness. Fly away from home, Stop, turn around - put away that fire Tame your desires, like a wild horse. There so much pain and suffering In those faraway towns Sickness, famine and drought and endless war
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#501945 - 11/18/18 04:24 AM
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Excellent song. Super vocal and lyric. Loved the backtrack as well..
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#501966 - 11/18/18 05:53 AM
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Outstanding! I really enjoyed all the elements of the song! I listened to it several times before I read your lyrics, and I enjoyed how are you inserted the Russian verse among the English lyrics. I like the movement of this song, and the instrumentation that you selected.
As I have said before, I totally enjoy your choice of words that I do not think would find their way into lyrics written by an English speaker: egret, magma, etc. Believe it or not, this inspires me to look beyond the easy, common, familiar words that are within easy reach for an English speaking lyric writer, and go for something more unique.
Your vocal delivery, and the entire recording, was very appealing, and I enjoyed listening to it the second time even more than the first!
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#501972 - 11/18/18 06:07 AM
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Man, another good song from you! I wish I had a fraction of your skills as a lyricist.
Vocal sounds good, and the track sounds good too!
Production wise I love that section that starts at 2:11 or so with the guitar and then the flute taking over. Nice way to end the song too!
You have come a long way in a short period of time, well done!
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#502003 - 11/18/18 09:03 AM
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Scott, thank you for listening and great feedback. Tano, thank you for encouragement! Lyrics are a bit simple, I should expect more from myself... I guess it is like a permanent tattoo, I will get better at it, but it always be through some kind of prism of past experiences. Dave, Thank you! Oh please, do not demote yourself. Your music is great in all respects! And I am not forgetting that you are the one who helped me understand the basic concept of EQ using my tools I am not of a "gentle" kind and take hard critique well, if it is aimed at music/lyrics and not me as a person. So, please do not be shy. Most of you are far above my musical skills, so I do value critique of this forum very much. Thank you! Misha.
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#502048 - 11/18/18 02:18 PM
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Rustyspoon,
Another fabulous, heart felt & heart wrenching song.
Excellent mix & the treatment on the flute is perfect too.
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#502068 - 11/18/18 06:33 PM
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Listening to you sing is a treat - there`s genuine feeling in your voice and you have a unique way with words.
This is also has a cool rhythmn and the chorus is catchy ( despite the subject).
The only comment I`d make on improvement, is that the arrangement seemed to lose energy where you take things down on verse2.Perhaps its the style change from the chorus.
On the whole I love the instrumental choices you made- as Dave said, the guitar/flute break is very good.
Robert
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#502082 - 11/18/18 09:51 PM
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Misha,
You always post the most interesting music - and I truly love each one. I have to repeat the kind words about the guitar-flute lead. Your vocals are always superb. I wish to have even one-fourth your vocal ability. Listerned all the way through and commented after deep into the second listen. What a joy to listen to!
Best to you.
Alan
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#502112 - 11/19/18 04:17 AM
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A very moving song Misha, your delivery conveys the super lyrics perfectly. I loved the way you perched light instrumental sounds on a 'heavy' rhythm section in the choruses, providing an appropriate contrast to the verses. Nice work.  John
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#502121 - 11/19/18 05:32 AM
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Rayc, Thank you for listening and feedback! Robert, Exactly what I was looking for! Thank you for listening and for pointing out energy loss on verse 2! Got too involved in this tune and "lost" ability to listen critically. This tip is gold! Alan, thank you for kind words! You have so much variety of your own, that soon I will run out of themes to keep you interested John, thank you for listening and the comment on light instrumentals. I did not think of this in the way you put it, just done it by ear. Now, when you put it in words, it makes total sense. Best regards, Misha.
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#502123 - 11/19/18 06:07 AM
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Great song. Thanks for sharing. Love the lyrics too and I completely agree with "There so much pain and suffering"...  Keep up the good work!
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#502136 - 11/19/18 07:26 AM
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Nice work on this one Love the groove on it, and the progressions were really stand out as well. I thought the backing track choice was flawless, and as others have mentioned - you really have a way with lyrics. They are simultaneously abstract yet relatable. You knocked this one out of the park - great job and thanks for sharing!
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#502166 - 11/19/18 10:22 AM
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A very enjoyable composition... Thanks for sharing.
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#502180 - 11/19/18 11:48 AM
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hi misha great job on everything vocal mix oh and bass drum nice perfect thanks eric
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#502223 - 11/19/18 03:18 PM
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Wow, Misha. This song almost brought tears to my eyes.
A few years after the "Wall" went down I worked in Russia for a short period of time and I felled in love with some of the Russian folk music and bought quite a lot of CD's with it at that time.
Your song instantly brought memories back from that time and from that musical tradition. It was a real pleasure to listen to this track - your voice is outstanding good in my humble opinion.
Thank you for sharing!
Will
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#502235 - 11/19/18 06:10 PM
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Fellows, Thank you for listening and for very supportive comments! This is probably the most feedback I got for song in many years
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#502617 - 11/20/18 07:11 PM
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Dear "Rustyspoon#"...
I think that only a person truly committed to real change could even attempt to employ "the arts", in this case, composing music, to affect that change. It also takes compassion and certain amount of fearlessness. In your song, "Put Away That Fire", the combination of those traits has produced what some would call an "anthem".
"The Free Dictionary" on the Web defines that word as "a popular song, especially a rock song felt to sum up the attitudes or feelings associated with a period or social group". All this is just to say, "Rustyspoon#", that you are following in the footsteps of artists such as Joan Baez, John Lennon, Bob Dylan, Pete Seeger, Holly Near, and others songwriter/performers who, fed-up with senseless killing, irrational hatred and unnecessary human suffering in general, acted on their stirred-up, tortured conscience to persuade a long-troubled world to try to think about seeing things their way.
Your emotional investment in what you describe as "pacifism" is in your urgent voice as much as it is in your unsparing lyrics. The music as realized through your RealTrack picks is folksy and full-bodied, with the flute phrases rising above all like the proverbial dove with an olive branch in its beak.
It's been a pleasure to look into your heart, "Rustyspoon#!!! I like what I discovered there.
LOREN
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#502634 - 11/20/18 08:08 PM
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Good write, love the arrangement with the rise and fall and various instruments weaving in and out. I really like this song! 
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#502822 - 11/21/18 09:41 AM
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Loren, thank you for kind words! I wish I could have a tiny fraction of the talent and drive of the artists you mentioned Maybe times are getting more turbulent, maybe I am getting older.., but for strange reason, it seems that people are forgetting about horrors that world lived through in 1910s and 1940s. Unfortunately there are less people every day, that lived through the last World War that can remind us what bullying can lead to. David, Thank you for your comment!
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#502905 - 11/21/18 02:02 PM
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I agree with the others: fabulous lyrics and musically mesmerizing.
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