|
Log in to post
|
Print Thread |
|
|
|
|
|
User Showcase
|
Joined: Sep 2016
Posts: 2,360
Veteran
|
OP
Veteran
Joined: Sep 2016
Posts: 2,360 |
Hi everyone, This is a new song of me. Well, actually it is a year old, but I had it lying on a shelf. I rearranged it somewhat. The lyrics are a bit sensitive, but the music is more sunny and with nice sologitars in it. I hope you like it. It is called https://soundcloud.com/user-296497130/its-on-me
The style I used is called Ditty. It's in Bm and the tempo is around 100 (102). I changed some instruments to shape it like I want it to sound: a bit Latin, a bit Funky within a Rock-Pop setting. I could be a bit wrong with this (I hesitate about that 'Rock') but you may help me with that. Oh, and if you have some critic on the song or whatever, please tell me. I like to learn. Best regards, Hans The lyrics: Its on me (c) HwBerkhout march 2018 -rearranged sept. 2019 I'm imprisoned inside my mind Don't know the way out, not in any kind My heart keeps yelling, what's happens to me? Can I reverse my life now, is there hope to see? Ooh, I felt trapped here in my own cage I cannot free me, not on my age It was that morning, it got on me Life can't be beaten, not by me No, it can't be beaten, not this time Hee, can you see me There is something I cannot say with words Have you heard my voice this morning I was feeding all my feelings to the birds It's on me, that I see =solo= I'm in an ocean of build-up fears No solution ready, so it appears But the voice inside me, the one I trust, Say things get better, that is a must Will the sun shine? Will I find life? Those who can tell me, had not arrive But still it happened, my life rearranged Time was the doctor, to help me change I now see that, just in time Hee, can you feel it There is something I cannot say with words Have you heard my voice this morning When feeding all my feelings to the birds? Ah, no! =solo= Hee, can you feel it There is something I cannot say with words Have you heard my voice this morning When feeding all my feelings to the birds? Did you notice I was smiling? My prison finally opened up its door I feel free for the first time Something I hadn't felt before So, come on and drink It's on me![color:#3333FF][/color]
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
User Showcase
|
Joined: Mar 2018
Posts: 5,857
Veteran
|
|
Veteran
Joined: Mar 2018
Posts: 5,857 |
Hans, Cool song! Phrasing and arrangement is spot on. I liked The hand drums on this, makes whole thing smooth and gives a chance to focus on lyrics. "feeding all my feelings to the birds" I liked that. Mix is one of your best., but...(you asked  ) Arrangement has very accoustic feel: guitar and drums with a lot of intimate proximity, but vocals have a distant effect of a hall. I am not the guy to suggest proper mixing technique, but I think dryer vocals migh work better with the rest of arrangement. Enjoyed it! Thank you for sharing! Misha.
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
User Showcase
|
Joined: Apr 2016
Posts: 6,407
Veteran
|
|
Veteran
Joined: Apr 2016
Posts: 6,407 |
Drier vocals, (most of the bottom end of them seems to be in the tail), as well as dropping the level of them a bit would suit my taste.
At present it sounds like you're in a different room and close to the mic.
The level and wetness of the solo should be your guide to settle the vocal then this good piece of writing will sound even better.
Cheers
rayc
"What's so funny about peace, love & understanding?" - N.Lowe
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
User Showcase
|
Joined: Nov 2007
Posts: 5,232
Veteran
|
|
Veteran
Joined: Nov 2007
Posts: 5,232 |
First of all I really like this song! Very good writing, great vocal and I like your instrument choices too.
I agree with the other comments about the reverb on the vocal, drop that down a bit and it will be perfect.
But a minor quibble, and it didn't take away from my enjoyment of your song.
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
User Showcase
|
Joined: Feb 2017
Posts: 3,414
PG Music Staff
|
|
PG Music Staff
Joined: Feb 2017
Posts: 3,414 |
Nicely done! I thought it flowed really well, and the instrumentation was unique and really lush. Love the upbeat groove on it, and thought your vocals went perfectly. Thanks for sharing
Cheers,
Deryk
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
User Showcase
|
Joined: Oct 2016
Posts: 1,564
Expert
|
|
Expert
Joined: Oct 2016
Posts: 1,564 |
I agree, really rolled along nicely. The words were cool, but remained in perspective as musical elements. Congratulations!
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
User Showcase
|
Joined: May 2017
Posts: 1,682
Expert
|
|
Expert
Joined: May 2017
Posts: 1,682 |
Nicely delivered big meaningful song , lyrically engaging with a great sound to go with it along the lines of Johnny cash as I hear it.
Thanks
win 10 64 bit 16gb,i7 chip, ssd 500gb, m-audio air, ,Roland BK-7M, 1000,shure sm7b,sonar,acid,mixcraft, variety of plugins.Sample tank 3,Kontakt. TC Helicon Voicelive 3 2 . https://beatmaster1.bandcamp.com/releases
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
User Showcase
|
Joined: Nov 2006
Posts: 3,843
Veteran
|
|
Veteran
Joined: Nov 2006
Posts: 3,843 |
Enjoyable groove, has sort of folk mood, I would call this city folk, brings images of imigrants playing in New York. Great arrangement, I especially like that solo guitarist (could you provide the realtrack number?) and the djembe drum. Good vocals. And nice message about time as a doctor.
Janne
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
User Showcase
|
Joined: Oct 2008
Posts: 19,054
Veteran
|
|
Veteran
Joined: Oct 2008
Posts: 19,054 |
Hi Hans,
Wow! I love this groove and it sits so very well with your vocals.
The intro was superb. You grabbed my attention right from the start and I didn't waver at any stage. In addition, your singing is excellent and through my headphones this morning it sounds confident, sincere and really well mixed with the backing.
The collection of Realtracks and Realdrums that you've used are awesome. I thoroughly enjoyed this musical journey.
All the best,
Noel
MY SONGS...Audiophile BIAB 2024
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
User Showcase
|
Joined: Jun 2012
Posts: 18,769
Veteran
|
|
Veteran
Joined: Jun 2012
Posts: 18,769 |
Hans, thoroughly enjoyable, great lyrics, creative and thought provoking.
This is really excellent all the way through.
The rhythmic undertones drive the music in an incredibly cool way. Excellent.
BIAB & RB2024 Win.(Audiophile), Sonar Platinum, Cakewalk by Bandlab, Izotope Prod.Bundle, Roland RD-1000, Synthogy Ivory, Kontakt, Focusrite 18i20, KetronSD2, NS40M Monitors, Pioneer Active Monitors, AKG K271 Studio H'phones
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
User Showcase
|
Joined: Dec 2003
Posts: 5,575
Veteran
|
Veteran
Joined: Dec 2003
Posts: 5,575 |
Hans,
Quite a powerful piece, nicely composed and an excellent set of backing tracks.
Strong vocal performance.
Some nice mix tips in the comments.
Well done.
Peter
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
User Showcase
|
Joined: Dec 2013
Posts: 6,952
Veteran
|
|
Veteran
Joined: Dec 2013
Posts: 6,952 |
Cool song Hans!! Very pleasant listen....catchy and very well arranged and produced! As you say, interesting contrast between music and lyrics. Nice job!! Take care. Greg
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
User Showcase
|
Joined: Dec 2011
Posts: 14,378
Veteran
|
|
Veteran
Joined: Dec 2011
Posts: 14,378 |
Hey, we like that a lot!
Cool mixture of backing tracks.
I think it was Tom Adams who once told us that a sad song can sometimes be presented best
with a contrasting upbeat groove.
This is a good example of that.
The mix sounds super on our monitors.
Well done!
J&B
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
User Showcase
|
Joined: Aug 2018
Posts: 1,381
Expert
|
|
Expert
Joined: Aug 2018
Posts: 1,381 |
Lots of "sad" songs have upbeat music. We just don't always notice until we listen closer. Subversion of expectation. This certainly ends "hopeful" and happy, and if you're buying, I'd like to show up. The band is fantastic and you carry the extra-fine lyric well. I really enjoyed this.
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
User Showcase
|
Joined: Apr 2018
Posts: 1,869
Expert
|
|
Expert
Joined: Apr 2018
Posts: 1,869 |
Hans,
First off, terrific, just terrific vocal . . . but, yeah, just a slight downward adjustment on the reverb (it particularly shows in the latter half of the song), but otherwise it fits well with the rest of the tune. The instrumental supports this so well—really nice production touches on this. Good stuff!
My kindest regards,
Deej
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
User Showcase
|
Joined: Dec 2011
Posts: 7,639
Veteran
|
|
Veteran
Joined: Dec 2011
Posts: 7,639 |
What a cool intro. Really cool mix on this song. The vocal and instruments really stood out. Super vocal as well
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
User Showcase
|
Joined: Dec 2009
Posts: 1,193
Expert
|
|
Expert
Joined: Dec 2009
Posts: 1,193 |
Hello, 'Birchwood'...
Whatever the Real Tracks were that you applied to your song, It's On Me!, they combined to create a rhythm that was lively and attractive (Celtic, perhaps?). The small number of instruments lent a close, intimate feel to the music, which allowed the troubled lyrics to be heard clearly, in all their pain.
The singer (was it you?) delivered the lyrics in a voice that was intense, urgent, and unsparing. There is a 'nakedness' of emotion in the words that is barely contained. The experience of writing them must have been quite a personal 'trip', I imagine.
And yet, as you said, "...the music is a bit more sunny". That's true, and it provides an interesting contrast to the rather downbeat mood of the lyrics, as forum members 'Tangmo' and 'Greg Johnson' mentioned in their own comments on your song.
I found your production to be an arresting listening experience, 'Birchwood'!
Truly,
- bluage -
Last edited by bluage; 10/10/19 08:09 PM.
"Music is what feelings sound like."-- borrowed from a Cakewalk Music Creator forum member, "Mamabear".
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
User Showcase
|
Joined: Sep 2016
Posts: 2,360
Veteran
|
|
OP
Veteran
Joined: Sep 2016
Posts: 2,360 |
Hi everyone,
I am sorry I couldn't respond earlier. I was on Cyprus and couldn't figure out what my password was for our forum.
But it is truly a very nice experience reading all your posts one after the other. Nice homecoming, so thanks!
Misha, Ray, Dave Peter and Deej56 mentioned that reverb-issue (beside your compliments about the song). I also read the majority of the 'posters' said it sounded good. So what to do now...? Nah, I will correct it, you are right.
Deryk, Ed, Noel and Scott, thanks for your nice words and mentioning the supervocals (Scott). Beware, I may walk beside my shoes now (a Dutch saying, or maybe in every language).
VideoTrack, Greg, Janice and Bud, Tangmo, you mentioned a sad song can sometimes be presented by an upbeat to make the message gets more attention. That's exactly what I wanted here. Otherwise it would be so depressing listening to it. But sometimes it is also nice to have a nice melancolic melody with sad lyrics. The other way around will never work, I think. And Tangmo, you are very welcome; it's on me!
Beatmaster heard something of Johnny Cash in this song. I have sent your reply to my son (a Johnny Cash-fan). I think/hope he will show me more respect now ;-), so thanks for that.
And last but not least, Janne an Bluage; Yes, I sing, write and compose all my songs myself. On some occassions I asked Joanne Cooper to sing or sing along. And there is allways something personall in the lyrics. In this song, you are right, there were some serious troubles but writing about it works out fine. And I don't want songs to end sad. There must always be something to hold on to...
And Bluage, you can call me Hans if you like. Birchwood is my familyname translated in English. I used it since the 70ths when having a band and making music.
The instruments I used are all real tracks: Bas 2620, Cello 3270, Drums DjembeKeita Sw16, guitar 1 2779, guitar 2 3251 (bariton, el), guitar 3 (solo) 597 Bluegrass and finally the violin 2453. The style is Ditty and the tempo is 102.
Thanks to all of you for your kind and interesting words,
Hans
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
User Showcase
|
Joined: Dec 2009
Posts: 1,193
Expert
|
|
Expert
Joined: Dec 2009
Posts: 1,193 |
And Bluage, you can call me Hans if you like. Birchwood is my familyname translated in English. I used it since the 70ths when having a band and making music.
Dear 'birchwood'... 'Hans,' it is, then . Thank you! Sincerely, LOREN (a.k.a. 'bluage')
"Music is what feelings sound like."-- borrowed from a Cakewalk Music Creator forum member, "Mamabear".
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
User Showcase
|
Joined: Aug 2012
Posts: 11,831
Veteran
|
|
Veteran
Joined: Aug 2012
Posts: 11,831 |
Hans,
A cool sounding song. Interesting write.
The BAND that you chose is an excellent choice for the lyric.
I agree with the comments about the vocal - well done, but needs a little less volume and a little less reverb. The rest of the mix is good..
Again...a very interesting song and sound.
fj
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Ask sales and support questions about Band-in-a-Box using natural language.
ChatPG's knowledge base includes the full Band-in-a-Box User Manual and sales information from the website.
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Video - Band-in-a-Box® DAW Plugin Version 6 for Mac®: New Features for Reaper
Band-in-a-Box® 2024 for Mac® - Update Today!
Band-in-a-Box® 2024 for Mac® Video - Over 50 New Features and Enhancements!
Band-in-a-Box® 2024 for Mac® Video - DAW Plugin Version 6 New Features
The Band-in-a-Box® 2024 for Mac® Free Bonus PAK!
Along with the 50+ new features added with Band-in-a-Box® 2024 for Mac®, we've also released an awesome collection of new Add-ons! On top of the 222 new RealTracks (+50 bonus RealTracks), we've also released new MIDI SuperTracks, Instrumental Studies, "Songs with Vocals" Artist Performance Sets, Playable RealTracks Set 3, Playable RealDrums Set 2, and two new sets of "RealDrums Stems."
Order Band-in-a-Box® 2024 for Mac during our special (which ends July 31st) and you'll receive a Free Bonus PAK that includes a lot of these new Add-ons:
- MIDI Styles Set 88: "Look Ma! More MIDI 11: SynthMaster"
- Instrumental Studies Set 20: New Orleans Piano
- MIDI SuperTracks Set 40: More SynthMaster
- MIDI SuperTracks Set 43: Rock & Pop Keys
- Artist Performance Set 15: Songs with Vocals volume 5
- Playable RealTracks Set 3
- Playable RealDrums Set 2
- SynthMaster Sounds and Styles, with audio demos
- RealCombos 2024 Booster PAK:
*For Pro customers, this includes 35 new RealTracks and 58 new RealStyles.
*For MegaPAK customers, this includes 25 new RealTracks and 45 new RealStyles.
*For UltraPAK customers, this includes 28 new RealStyles.
- RealDrums Stems Set 6: More Pop, Rock & Country
Want even more new Add-ons? Boost your Free Bonus PAK to a 2024 49-PAK for just $49 and add even more new Add-ons to your collection:
- 50 Bonus Unreleased RealTracks & RealDrums
- MIDI Styles Set 89: "Look Ma! More MIDI 12: Funk, Jazz & Blues Keys"
- Instrumental Studies Set 21: '80s Hard Rock Guitar
- MIDI SuperTracks Set 41: Jazz Comping & Soloing Piano
- MIDI SuperTracks Set 42: Soul & New Orleans Keys
- Artist Performance Set 16: Songs with Vocals volume 6
- RealDrums Stems Set 5: Jazz, Latin, Funk & World
Listen to Demos of the Free Bonus PAK & 49-PAK: https://youtu.be/ZezLjinyb-4
Band-in-a-Box® 2024 for Mac® Video - Boot Camp: Working with the Newest Features!
Band-in-a-Box® 2024 for Mac® Videos: One-Stop Shopping!
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Forums65
Topics82,382
Posts743,945
Members38,761
| |
Most Online2,537
Jan 19th, 2020
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Dansk
Deutsch - Windows
Español
Français - Windows
Italiano - Windows
Nederlands
Polski
Português
Svenskt
русский
Japanese
Simplified Chinese
Traditional Chinese
Korean