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#609530 - 08/05/20 09:22 AM [User Showcase] Waltzing At The Rainbow`s End
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The last waltz, stage version.
Very busy moving house I decided to enter a challenge ( another forum) to write a 3/4 song.
The opening lines are cobbled from a W.H. Auden poem.
Not sure about the ending- threw everything at it to try for the full cast chorus.I might rethink it if listeners have good suggestions.
Thanks for listening!

Waltzing At The Rainbow`s End

Style is _CFPBTSW.STY (Slow Country Waltz w/ 2 Fingerpi)

RealTracks in style: ~1121:Bass, Acoustic, CountryWaltz Sw 085
RealTracks in song: ~1125:Fiddle, Background CountryWaltz Sw 110
RealTracks in style: ~2053:Guitar, Acoustic, Fingerpicking CountryWaltzBrent Sw 085
RealTracks in style: ~822:Guitar, Acoustic, Fingerpicking Country Waltz Sw 085
RealTracks in song: 3431:Jaw Harp, Rhythm FolkWaltzSlowSwing Sw 085
RealTracks in song: 1097:Piano, Acoustic, Rehearsal Waltz Sw 085
RealDrums [in style:NashClassicWaltzSw^1-a:SideStick, HiHat , b:Snare, HiHat




Waltzing At The Rainbow`s End


the play begins as an ocean
is folded and hung to dry
seven stars go squawking
like geese about the sky

ropes and rollers rumble storms
where the world falls away
with bricks of many colours
you build an arch
day after day

should the rainmaker relent
in your company I`d be honoured to pretend
waltzing at the rainbows end

climbing through a trapdoor
down the tree of your life
ransacked by ravens
dreams open to the sky

the prompter reads backwards
the hero loses his way
between maidens and villains
he wanders
all over the stage

on paper wings to ascend
start the music we`ll pretend
waltzing at the rainbows end

waltzing at the rainbows end
waltzing at the rainbows end
hold on with your eyes
the curtain descends
waltzing at the rainbows end


© Robert Cordrey July 2020

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#609532 - 08/05/20 10:18 AM [User Showcase] Re: Waltzing At The Rainbow`s End [Re: Robertkc]
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Cool, Robert. "Stage version." I like that. Lyrics were quite a story. Wonderful metaphors. Well sung, as always, and good use of chorus tracks.
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#609622 - 08/06/20 06:39 AM [User Showcase] Re: Waltzing At The Rainbow`s End [Re: Robertkc]
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Robert,

A nice piece. Has a light-theatrical-rock kind of feel. With lyrics that remind me of hearing one of my college roommate's record playing - King Crimson, early Genesis...

"on paper wings to ascend
start the music we`ll pretend
waltzing at the rainbows end"

Nice.

Good mix. Good vocals. The "gathering" in the end works.

Very nice album cover!

fj

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#609643 - 08/06/20 12:19 PM [User Showcase] Re: Waltzing At The Rainbow`s End [Re: Robertkc]
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This is so, so beautiful. Your lyrics are, as most times with you, shrouded in mystery of meaning, so clear - in plain sight - and yet so elusive ... always nevertheless beautiful. The music is soothing to listen to, and it's sung sensitively, as always. The waltz has a tinge of sadness to it, which is perhaps as it should be, given the lyrics.

Don't ever stop writing and creating songs ... you write raw, real, original songs - never the "usual, rehashed stuff". They could stamp ORIGINAL on your forehead ;-) - so, howsoever that may be, please keep creating. Wonderful stuff. Thank you.
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#609669 - 08/06/20 02:28 PM [User Showcase] Re: Waltzing At The Rainbow`s End [Re: Robertkc]
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Cool tune. Love the rhythm to the song Super vocal and lyric

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#609688 - 08/06/20 05:46 PM [User Showcase] Re: Waltzing At The Rainbow`s End [Re: Robertkc]
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Enjoyed my listen, Robert..
Creative imagery, lovely vocals, solid use of the old 3/4--made it seem fresh, new.
Great work!

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#609753 - 08/07/20 09:40 AM [User Showcase] Re: Waltzing At The Rainbow`s End [Re: Robertkc]
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Marty, Floyd, Musician17,Scott,Tano Music:
I appreciate those listens and positive comments!

Robert

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#609758 - 08/07/20 10:42 AM [User Showcase] Re: Waltzing At The Rainbow`s End [Re: Robertkc]
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This is excellent Robert. A beautiful folk waltz.

"should the rainmaker relent
in your company I`d be honoured to pretend
waltzing at the rainbow`s end"

Love this...

Bob

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#609809 - 08/07/20 07:22 PM [User Showcase] Re: Waltzing At The Rainbow`s End [Re: Robertkc]
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A poet borrows from a poet who borrowed from a poet. You're keeping me on my liberal arts toes, RKC! 3/4 time suits you well. I liked it from the very beginning (ocean is folded and hung up to dry). Always a pleasure to see where you're going with things and how you're 'cobbling' them together. Thanks again for another worthy piece of work! You've made me want to dig out my old DVD of the BBC's version of The Tempest, and I'll probably do just that later on tonight.
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#609810 - 08/07/20 07:52 PM [User Showcase] Re: Waltzing At The Rainbow`s End [Re: Robertkc]
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LOVELY song Robert, I enjoyed my listen a lot

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#609819 - 08/08/20 01:08 AM [User Showcase] Re: Waltzing At The Rainbow`s End [Re: Robertkc]
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Really well done, Robert!

You are so good at painting pictures with words, quite remarkable.

Mix sounds great, and I like what you did at the end too.

Enjoyed!

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#609821 - 08/08/20 02:00 AM [User Showcase] Re: Waltzing At The Rainbow`s End [Re: Robertkc]
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Nice arrangement and wonderfully impressionist lyrics.
The melody is the slightly convoluted sort you excellent in.
Lovely stuff.
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#609912 - 08/08/20 04:03 PM [User Showcase] Re: Waltzing At The Rainbow`s End [Re: Robertkc]
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Really pretty song Robert!! One of my faves of yours! Love the bouncy feel, and the wonderful use of the strings! Always impressed with your poetic prowess!! Nicely done!! Take care. Greg

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#610033 - 08/09/20 12:57 PM [User Showcase] Re: Waltzing At The Rainbow`s End [Re: Robertkc]
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Hi Robertkc,

Your voice is captivating. the chorus is well done. The arrangement is super beautiful. I find this song a real success and deserves to be complimented.
Thanks

Best regard


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#610046 - 08/09/20 02:28 PM [User Showcase] Re: Waltzing At The Rainbow`s End [Re: Robertkc]
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A very sensitive song, Robert!

But all your songs are beautiful and sensitive and your lyrics very well written. Sometimes a bit hard to understand for 'foreigners'.
I was only thinking what the challenge was of singing this waltz. It is beautiful for sure, but not really complicated. At the beginning of this year I made a waltz with some tempo changes in it. that have caused some problems. Don't get me wrong on this and maybe I misunderstood your lines about that challenge, because you also wrote that was another forum?

And about your ending of the song; To me the violin continues a bit too long on its own. Maybe you can let the guitar and the Jaw harp play along some last strokes to keep a somewhat filled sound.

But never mind these remarks, you just made another good song.

Hans
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#610070 - 08/09/20 05:23 PM [User Showcase] Re: Waltzing At The Rainbow`s End [Re: Robertkc]
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Hi Robert
Much enjoyed - I do love a waltz. Poetic lyrics, as per usual, that conjure strong visuals.
(Coincidentally, I also pinched a line from an Auden poem for some lyrics I wrote the other day.)
Regards,
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#610095 - 08/10/20 01:21 AM [User Showcase] Re: Waltzing At The Rainbow`s End [Re: Robertkc]
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Hi Robert.
Sorry for the late comment as I thought I had already (senior moment).
Absolutely love this. It is refreshing to hear a 3/4 song.
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#610193 - 08/10/20 05:41 PM [User Showcase] Re: Waltzing At The Rainbow`s End [Re: Robertkc]
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Robert,

Pretty tune, pretty vocal. Poetic write with some killer lines, and I love that title/hook. That piano does a great job of establishing and maintaining a rhythm that really keeps the listener engaged. Very well done!

All my best,

Deej

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#610221 - 08/10/20 06:30 PM [User Showcase] Re: Waltzing At The Rainbow`s End [Re: Robertkc]
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Robert

A nice delicate waltz, very evocative and well produced.
Nice ending and an excellent vocal.

One of your finest.

Peter

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#610223 - 08/10/20 06:33 PM [User Showcase] Re: Waltzing At The Rainbow`s End [Re: Robertkc]
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Very beautiful song, Robert!

it is a breath of fresh air to my ears... thanks a lot for sharing!

Will

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