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#647761 - 03/21/21 04:22 AM [User Showcase] If you Need A Shoulder
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Birchwood Offline
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Hello fellow musicians,

I thought it would be time for something different in these heavy times; a heavy topic! cry
https://soundcloud.com/user-296497130/need_a_shoulder

On the other hand, it's a song with a nice melody (I think), so maybe you will like it.
I made it like this, because the news that came to me over the last months had little entertainment value, I think that did it. But it was fun singing it!
At first I made it with a lower tempo, but the more I sang it the higher the tempo knob was set.

I hope you like it, but tell me what I can improve (if there is any... blush)
Hans (Birchwood)

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Technical information and lyrics
The song:
Style: MAUL.STY (Maul Mallets Folk Pop, tempo 105

RealTracks : ~~683:Bas, Bas2: 2612
RealTracks : 3673:Piano, Acoustic
RealTracks : 2930:Guitar, Acoustic
RealTracks : 3583:Guitar, Acoustic, cello: 3261
RealTracks : 2625:Guitar, Baritone
RealTracks : 3643:Guitar, Electric
RealDrums:MalletsFolkPop8ths, Drum2: LaPopJazzLaidBackev16 

I used another drum and bassguitar and added a cello in the second part of the song.
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Lyrics:
Need a shoulder
HWBerkhout, (c) march 2021

I need some time to think
and lots of time to mourn
Until judgement day comes
I will be torn

There were days I slept swell
I remember them well
I offered people my shoulder
One to lean on

But it ain't you and it ain't me
We couldn't make a world we need
We were paralyzed by its decay
or feel so anyway

At these days I can't sleep
I'd rather like to weep
I couldn't offer my shoulder
Not to lean on

It ain't me and it ain't you
We couldn't fight for what we need to
Like global warming and other distress
Against greed that worsens this mess...

Bridge

Can you still sleep well?
Once you'd seen this hell
Or do you need a shoulder
One to lean on?

Oh, it ain't me, and it ain't you
We couldn't make the world we need to
We still don't know what we must do
No, we have no clue

Since when are these problems in the air?
Or were they always there?
Maybe we do need a shoulder
One to lean on

solo

Its so crazy to hear me say
within some time all is away
Now we really need a shoulder
One to cry on

Perhaps we still can change our situation?
And act with a 'clever' regulation?
But it ain't you and it ain't me
We haven't the slightest idea

We feel so helpless
All life is defenseless
But it needs you and it needs me
to turn this misery...
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#647774 - 03/21/21 06:56 AM [User Showcase] Re: If you Need A Shoulder [Re: Birchwood]
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Hans,

The opening guitar and bass are really nice. Vocal sits with them nicely.

Good song. Nice message.

Good build to the tracks. Good mix. A good listen.
The vocal gets "just a bit 'hot'" in the second half (but only slightly).

Enjoyed.

fj

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#647895 - 03/22/21 04:29 AM [User Showcase] Re: If you Need A Shoulder [Re: Birchwood]
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I had a listen yesterday but didn't have time to comment.

As always I really like your vocal, there is a really nice quality to your voice.

Good song, enjoyed the listen.

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#647964 - 03/22/21 09:55 AM [User Showcase] Re: If you Need A Shoulder [Re: Birchwood]
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Cool tune Hans. Excellent vocal. Super back track

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#648024 - 03/22/21 06:53 PM [User Showcase] Re: If you Need A Shoulder [Re: Birchwood]
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Will Josef Offline
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Hi Hans,

Oh, this is a nice song. As always your vocal is shining... I really appreciate that you are sharing your inspiring tracks with us!

Will

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#648040 - 03/23/21 02:11 AM [User Showcase] Re: If you Need A Shoulder [Re: Birchwood]
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Hans

Very nice production, a pretty melody, very good vocal and a good band.

Nicely done.

Peter

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#648050 - 03/23/21 04:05 AM [User Showcase] Re: If you Need A Shoulder [Re: floyd jane]
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Birchwood Offline
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Originally Posted By: floyd jane
Hans,

The opening guitar and bass are really nice. Vocal sits with them nicely.

Good song. Nice message.

Good build to the tracks. Good mix. A good listen.
The vocal gets "just a bit 'hot'" in the second half (but only slightly).

Enjoyed.

fj


Hi Floyd, thanks for your words.
I am afraid this kind of song will not do much, because of the subject.
But I liked it myself, so I posted it after all :-)
Maybe I listened to it too much because I didn't notice my 'hot' singing.
After your post I immediately adjusted part of the volume in the vocals. I think it is ok by now (?)
Thanks for warning me.

Hans
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#648051 - 03/23/21 04:09 AM [User Showcase] Re: If you Need A Shoulder [Re: BlueAttitude]
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Birchwood Offline
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Originally Posted By: BlueAttitude
I had a listen yesterday but didn't have time to comment.

As always I really like your vocal, there is a really nice quality to your voice.

Good song, enjoyed the listen.




Hi Dave, I'm glad you listened more quickly than to my earlier song ;-)
No, what I really mean is thanks for your nice comment and especially what you say about my vocals.
I still have to get used to them sometimes. They're getting older.
So..., more dark songs?

Hans
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#648196 - 03/23/21 06:38 PM [User Showcase] Re: If you Need A Shoulder [Re: Birchwood]
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Hi Hans
The news certainly doesn't have much entertainment value. You've channeled the heavy vibes into a good song, though.
Regards,
Leon

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#648205 - 03/23/21 07:39 PM [User Showcase] Re: If you Need A Shoulder [Re: Birchwood]
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Great up-beat groove to this, turning dark mainly in the chords (and, of course, the lyric). I'm a fan of your vocals and processing from first listen back when.
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#648281 - 03/24/21 09:13 AM [User Showcase] Re: If you Need A Shoulder [Re: Birchwood]
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I like the entire groove on this.

Got me swaying in my seat.

Good message, nice listen.

moto
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#648308 - 03/24/21 11:28 AM [User Showcase] Re: If you Need A Shoulder [Re: Birchwood]
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Good arrangement - I liked the changes in instruments.

Good vocals as well. While not "entertaining", a good listen. smile
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#648309 - 03/24/21 11:31 AM [User Showcase] Re: If you Need A Shoulder [Re: Birchwood]
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Very good lyrics on a timely subject, it really feels helpless not to be able to affect so many bad things going on in the world, but we can offer our shoulder to lean on - at least that we can do. The instrumentation is solid and the melody fits the groove of the band nicely. Another enjoyable vocal performance.

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#648472 - 03/25/21 09:25 AM [User Showcase] Re: If you Need A Shoulder [Re: Birchwood]
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Hans,
I enjoyed the groove of this ( you got the tempo right I think), its a little upbeat which keeps the mood from getting dark...and your return to the title theme is also positive.
Your vocals always hold my attention; you are as distinctive as ever here.
A good song!

Robert

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#648477 - 03/25/21 09:49 AM [User Showcase] Re: If you Need A Shoulder [Re: Will Josef]
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Birchwood Offline
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Originally Posted By: Scott C
Cool tune Hans. Excellent vocal. Super back track


Thanks Scott, what nice words, while I was hesitating a bit about the song
Gives me spirit to continue...

Originally Posted By: Will Josef
Hi Hans,
Oh, this is a nice song. As always your vocal is shining... I really appreciate that you are sharing your inspiring tracks with us!

Will


Wow Will, that is very nice of you! But you know, All..., no most of my songs I share with you and I then hope to get these nice replies!

Thank you both,
Hans
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#648757 - 03/26/21 06:42 PM [User Showcase] Re: If you Need A Shoulder [Re: Birchwood]
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Hans,
Dark tune with glimpse of hope. Good progression and instrumental arrangement except... Since I believe you not going to cry about, I think piano entering at 1:43 how to say it right...off beat syncopated? it has a certain pumping feel which distracts a little bit. Ohh yes, if you noticed, I have not said anything about vocals. I feel you trained your "mix" ears very well. Do not let it slip, it is a never ending learning process, break the mold of your own expectations - all you need is 'clever' regulation smile Thank you for sharing!

Misha.

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#648818 - 03/27/21 07:59 AM [User Showcase] Re: If you Need A Shoulder [Re: Birchwood]
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Hi Birchwood,

Lyrics that invites us to think. I like this progression in the introduction of the different musical instruments. As Floyd Jane mentioned, lowering the volume of the new instruments slightly in the second part would be a good idea. The mix is ​​well done. Pleasant composition. Well done.


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#648857 - 03/27/21 02:22 PM [User Showcase] Re: If you Need A Shoulder [Re: Birchwood]
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We were once told that an upbeat vibe can well deliver a
dark message if done right.

This is a great example of that and your passionate
vocal is very powerful.

We really like the band. The build is excellent as are the
later track additions. The lyric and melody are standout.

Really good!

J&B
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#648863 - 03/27/21 02:33 PM [User Showcase] Re: If you Need A Shoulder [Re: Birchwood]
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Love that acoustic guitar in the intro! Very engaging chord progression. And I'm always a fan of a building and changing arrangement.

Well written and performed. Very creative!




(on my speakers the eq on the ride and cymbals is really bright and harsh and distracted my attention away from your wonderfully written song)

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#648866 - 03/27/21 03:08 PM [User Showcase] Re: If you Need A Shoulder [Re: CaptainMoto]
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Birchwood Offline
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Hi Peter, Leon, Tangmo and Captain Moto,

Originally Posted By: PeterF
Hans
Very nice production, a pretty melody, very good vocal and a good band.
Nicely done.
Peter


Thanks a lot, Peter! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Originally Posted By: Leon1
Hi Hans
The news certainly doesn't have much entertainment value. You've channeled the heavy vibes into a good song, though.
Regards,
Leon


Hello Leon, Thanks! And it's not only the news. But I'm glad the song did.

Originally Posted By: Tangmo
Great up-beat groove to this, turning dark mainly in the chords (and, of course, the lyric). I'm a fan of your vocals and processing from first listen back when.


Hi Tangmo, It gives me a nice feeling I have you as a fan on my vocals. Thanks for that and your nice comment!


Originally Posted By: CaptainMoto
I like the entire groove on this.
Got me swaying in my seat.
Good message, nice listen.
moto


Hello Captain, It's a nice thing to get you swaying around! It didn't work with me, though. I hoped it would do something. So I'm mighty proud what it did to you. Thanks!

Thanks everyone for the nice words,
Hans
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