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Link: Green Is So Much Greener Without Blue Two-minute-something of unsophisticated cliché pop banality. Just what the doctor ordered. Short, so you don't have to suffer for too long. I don't know why many of my love songs are about ended and/or failed relationships. I'm still happily married. I'm probably the dark side of Marty. The Anti-Marty... The usual answers to all unasked questions:- My Chief Director of Linguistic Dadaism suggested to summarize the title with "Yellow" and call it a day.
- Don't ask. I myself have no idea why I came up with that intro.
Probably unconsious springtime fever or something. - Yes, with that voice you could probably write for a p*rn movie.
- No, I won't!
- The first version had more than twice as many lyrics.
With every word removed, the song got better.
So far I've only had this effect with guitars.
I guess the best song I'll ever write will be an instrumental without guitars.
Feedback (the good, the bad and the ugly) as always highly appreciated. As always, a BIG "thank you" to Marty for linguistic advice. Some technical information:Style: _FACULA.STY The band:Bass: 1522 Drums: PopRock8ths Guitars: 4157, 4387, 4388, 3931 Synthesizers: me, myself and I Vocals: Natalie + BG vocals Cong You can find the lyrics in the next post.
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Title: Green Is So Much Greener Without Blue
(Verse)
Ah...
It feels so good
It feels so good
To see you leave
And all my grief
Will start to stop
Oh...
Before you go
You gotta know
Life is so much better without you
Green is so much greener without blue
(Chorus)
This is my song that I sing along
To find the place where I belong
The symphony that makes me free
Like a dolphin in the sea
One song every day
Helps the memories fade away
Like a little bird in a tree
I feel free
(Verse)
Ooh...
Without you
I feel like new
All the things you said
That were running through my head
Back then
Were not true
Oh...
I don't know
How long ago
That I realized that these are our final days
Now the little tattoo on my shoulder says
(Chorus)
This is my song that I sing along
To find the place where I belong
The symphony that makes me free
Like a dolphin in the sea
One song every day
Helps the memories fade away
Like a little bird in a tree
I feel free
(Chorus)
This is my song that I sing along
To find the place where I belong
The symphony that makes me free
Like a dolphin in the open sea
One song every day
Helps the memories fade away
Like a little bird in a tree
I feel free
Last edited by B.D.Thomas; 03/23/24 02:28 PM. Reason: Lyrics added
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This is a really good rock song, lyrically and musically - it didn't come across as by Anti-Marty at all! I initially thought it was a male vocalist before seeing it was SV Natalie, but I've also heard Solaria sound like a male, though the first time I heard Bif Naked's "Lucky" I thought that was a male singer, too.
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Hmmmmmm.
Another classic piece of salacious movie sync license pop!!
Hey, I meant that as a compliment!!!!!
Kidding!!!!!!!!!!! Seriously, you are a master of this catchy pop genre. Really well done from start to finish.
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The melody for
"One song every day
Helps the memories fade away
Like a little bird in a tree
I feel free"
sounds more open, free and unconstrained than the rest of the song...which works given the structure & narrative.
Cool sounding thing though the lyrics don't really survive analysis, (perfectly pop).
Cheers
rayc
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Well, far be it from *ME* to dis "pop", banal or not. Ha! Very fun to listen to and nicely produced. Tres cool!
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Well, it just so happens that I'm a huge fan of unsophisticated cliché pop banality! Seriously I love your productions, always so well done. Love the dynamics! Excellent sounding track, sounds great through the 'phones. "I'm probably the dark side of Marty" 
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This is a really good rock song, lyrically and musically - it didn't come across as by Anti-Marty at all! I initially thought it was a male vocalist before seeing it was SV Natalie, but I've also heard Solaria sound like a male, though the first time I heard Bif Naked's "Lucky" I thought that was a male singer, too. Thanks Wao for listening and your feedback. Even though I often use Solaria because she is the most versatile singer, I actually prefer the alto voice, and that's where Natalie shines.
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Your write up is worth the price of admission!
“The first version had more than twice as many lyrics.
With every word removed, the song got better.”
Yep, perfection is when there is nothing left to take away … rather than add.
Like you we tend to write failed relationship songs for Janice to sing about “those bad men” (as Hans calls them😊) and like you we are very happily married but those songs are a good challenge.
Natalie sounds excellent and those breath intakes sound so natural.
The arrangement and the dynamics from the band and the singers are very good.
We love this:
“Life is so much better without you
Green is so much greener without blue”
Per always great audio and vid production.
Enjoyed it!
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Hmmmmmm.
Another classic piece of salacious movie sync license pop!!
Hey, I meant that as a compliment!!!!!
Kidding!!!!!!!!!!! Seriously, you are a master of this catchy pop genre. Really well done from start to finish. Thanks David ![[Linked Image - Only viewable when logged in]](https://www.pgmusic.com/forums/images/icons/default/thumbs_up.gif) I never really thought about the consequences of SongTradr licensing one of my songs to a p*rn movie company 
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No Bad. No Ugly.
Just Good. Good.Good.Good.Good.Good.Good.Good.
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Hey Brain, Even though this really isn't my genre, I can appreciate the effort that went into this. And it was an enjoyable listen. I don't get pop music anywhere else, only here. At first I thought, "Wait, these lyrics sound like a female perspective but I hear a male voice singing (probably his voice)." When the song ended, I scanned some of the earlier reviews and the proverbial light bulb lit, a synth voice is at play. Then the world made sense again, she underwent a sex change  Good job.
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I love this cliche pop music! And you do it so good!
I admire how well you've mastered the synth voices. I doubt I would have the faintest idea how to do them.
Nice!!!
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It's very well done. Good sound, good singing and dynamic.
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WOW That sounded AWESOME !!! The whole production was SPOT ON!!!
1 - How did you get Natalie to sound like a guy? and so Human? Cong? Where did you get that voice? is it English VDB?
2 - Like your lyrics ... excellent
3 - Use of Real Tracks fantastic
4 - Arrangement - Great
Over all !!!!!!
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Great song BD! Your productions are always so cool and I loved the guitars in this. The end was pretty cold, but I probably only felt that way because I wanted the song to continue. Really good stuff,
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Brain, that was fantastic.
Really great pop music
Super use of that synth voice.
Great mix.
Loved it.
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Very cool song, Brain. We often talk about the lyrics, and I might forget to mention how good the song is. It is. You are the master of those synth vocals. Excellent harmony and the song is so well developed with dynamics. That abrupt ending gets me every time.
BTW, I have my dark side and you're welcome to it, but still... green is yellow without blue. hehe Did you get my PM about green?
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Excellent pop production, BD.
I too thought it was a male vocal but what do we know?
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The melody for
"One song every day
Helps the memories fade away
Like a little bird in a tree
I feel free"
sounds more open, free and unconstrained than the rest of the song...which works given the structure & narrative.
Cool sounding thing though the lyrics don't really survive analysis, (perfectly pop). Good to see you again, Ray. I hope all is well. Thanks for listening and for your comment. I guess since I'm not a native speaker, none of my lyrics will stand up to deeper analysis, but as you said, for pop music it's enough
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