Nice song!

There's a bit of straining going on, but you're close enough on pitch that it's not a problem. I certainly prefer it to trying to pitch correct it!

But you do got a strong vibrato on held notes at the end of words. It's funny, because for sustained pitches in the middle of words you don't do it, and you're not running out of air. So it seems like you've got the vocal control, but you just back of when you're at the end of the word. It sounds... nervous, but it's not really that bad.

I think if you focus on keeping the vibrato down, it'll make a difference in the vocals.

I scoop my notes, go flat toward the end, and have excessive vibrato. So you're way ahead of me!

-- David Cuny
My virtual singer development blog

Vocal control, you say. Never heard of it. Is that some kind of ProTools thing?