You're a natural, my friend! I suspect you've been playing music for a while now haven't you? What a mellow voice, I'm so envious!

My take on the intro was that it's a bit different than one might expect, but I thought it worked. I like hearing the unexpected in music like this. It keeps me interested.

My only nitpick is the the song ended abruptly ... could have been faded to a full silence instead of to a partial silence then BAM.. no more song.

But that's a small thing and easily fixed. All in all I liked your song quite a bit.