I found this track to be well put together and nicely mixed
Was that you playing the solo at 2:17 Tim?

I feel that in many lines the delivery (phrasing) could use a re-think.

At 4:45 Maybe a little too long – I’m not sure that the bridge section should be repeated at 3:53. You should be looking to wind things down at that point.
Wow when you write a dark lyric, it sure is dark Tim!

Regards,

Marc