Josie, I hear Pat Pattison's songwriting influences in there and, may I say, you have learned well.

I think that you have a beautiful Jonie Mitchell/Joan Baez voice. Don't touch that, please. I would possibly raise the key a full step (maybe more) providing you stay in your range and comfort zone.

Work on the songwriting principles that Pat taught you so well and give him cause to be justifiably proud of you, a prized student.

You go girl!