Hi Alyn,

I'm stunned. This is incredibly good and incredibly engaging.



When you came to those two lines "I wanna know why, why you make me smile", I couldn't believe how powerful they sounded.

Also, there are some outstanding phrases in your words. The one that really resonated with me was "as you breathe nice and slowly in time with your feelings".

I'd love to know how to write songs like this.

You've certainly raised the forum's high jump bar with this one.

All the best,
Noel


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