Originally Posted By: Noel96
Hey floyd,

In all honesty, I don't think music gets any better than what you, Janice and Bud have put together here. This is beautiful; a sensitive and emotion-packed journey through the turmoil of heartbreak. Your composition is outstanding and Janice's and your performances sparkle with sincerity.


Noel - thank you. You do say the nicest things.

Originally Posted By: Noel96
The last two phrases of the chorus are incredibly powerful and perfectly placed to maximise the feeling of grief and loss that your lead character is experiencing. Also, the repetition of the chorus without any more verse-based development is a masterstroke. My observation, from studying many lyrics, is that repetition pretty much always adds dynamite to words when they are already a tinderbox of emotions. That's definitely the case here!


The song was basically "built" for that line. After the verse and chorus, I felt like I had said all I wanted to say... and repeating the chorus seemed like all there was left to do.

Originally Posted By: Noel96
I absolutely love your beginning without an introduction. It's incredibly effective.


It was the first thing that came to mind - and that's usually the best way to leave it.

Originally Posted By: Noel96
... it's not necessary to use all that many words to create a superb song. The catch with this, though, is that it's a double-edged sword. Because so few words are used in the lyrics, the spotlight is on every word and each one has to function to perfection.


Appreciate that you notice that...

Thanks Noel - I so enjoy your comments.

150+ Songs produced using BIAB RealTracks
And 50 more...
and some more...