Well, up front, this tune is right in our wheelhouse.
The lyrics are very strong. They are poetic and full
of creative imagery...sad but without being overwrought
or angst ridden. The write is complex but not
"intellectualized." That's not easy to do.

We think that your vocal delivery works very well on
this. I can't offer any comments regarding pitch
correction as we've never used one. I think Tom's
comments are spot on regarding your delivery.
Do it over, play around with....but keep this one. I think
it's immensely better than you seem to think. Perhaps
it will come to work for you. The timbre of it and the
emotion is extremely convincing as you work the lyrics.
I'm pretty sensitive to pitch and nothing there made me
even think about "cringing" - your word. smile

As you strive for vocal perfection you might lose a
bit of the raw emotion that this delivery demonstrates.
I may be wrong, there's ample precedent, but re effects
I'm of the school that perfection is not when there's
nothing left to add; rather, it's when there's nothing left
to take away.

Strings don't automatically work for us but here they really
accent the feel of your song. Great idea there.

Congrats all the away around on fine production and
a compelling write.

J&B

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