Alan,

I'm there with Tom and Charlie... one of my favorites of your lyrics, for sure. And a good melody, too.. Nice job of capturing that Elton-vibe on this... It really sounds like it could sit on one of his albums.

Your vocal is strong, solid...nice job on that.

A little thing... the vocal (IMO) is a bit too "out-front" - for the style of song that it is. An Elton-type rock number ought to have the vocal a bit more "in the mix". The piano ought to be just a hair shy of even-with-the-vocal (volume-wise). If you brought the piano up, then the other instruments would fall behind. In this case (for this song), I think pulling the vocal back until it sits in the mix would put the piano where it should be... A/B an Elton song (Rocket Man, maybe) and I think you will hear what I'm talking about...

That's a big paragraph for a small observation... Don't want it to detract form the fact that it is very well done... writing, singing, arrangement....

Enjoyed it.

floyd

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