Good song all around. Nice arrangement, very evocative.

Yep, that's a tough melody to sing, which I think is why intelligibility is low in places. Vocaloids don't know where to put emphasis on words, so "tally" gets emphasized on the second syllable, and "window" comes out as "wind of".

Using Vocaloids can be maddening... But they're better than nothing. Hopefully a vocalist will step up for this song!


-- David Cuny
My virtual singer development blog

Vocal control, you say. Never heard of it. Is that some kind of ProTools thing?