Hi Richard,

Nice bit of entertainment! The below verse appealed to me. I like how you personified time and became a bit more philosophical - both personification and philosophy can be very effective tools for verse development.

Quote:
The years so long and awkward the clock has seen them all
It watches over me now that they're gone
Its ra-dio is quiet these days time heals us in so many ways
It still lights my night and greets the dawn

That last line resonated with me "...still lights the night and greets the dawn."

I enjoyed it.

All the best,
Noel




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