Musiclover,

This is great! My favourite lines are...

Quote:

I wonder if there’s life on mars,
I wonder if somewhere amongst the stars there’s an answer

That's a very sophisticated rhyme pattern you've used there. When 'stars' completes the rhyme with 'mars', you sail on past the natural close that rhyme brings and you complete the line with an additional phrase. Awesome! I've tried to accomplish this a couple of times in my lyrics but I haven't yet been as successful as I'd like. This type of rhyming puts you in the company of people like Paul Simon and Neil Diamond (see the choruses from "Homeward Bound" and "Solitary Man" below).

Originally Posted By: Paul Simon

Homeward bound
I wish I was homeward bound
Home, where my thoughts escapin'
Home, where my music's playin'
Home, where my love lies waitin' silently for me

Originally Posted By: Neil Diamond

Don't know that I will
But until I can find me
The girl who'll stay
And won't play games behind me
I'll be what I am
A solitary man, solitary man

It's good to see you back in the forum.

All the best,
Noel



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