Nice song.

Although this stuck out like a sore thumb:

I tried to call you at the midnight hour,
But you were busy in your ivory tower,

You want to avoid cliches like the plague. (See what I did there? I'm a horrible, horrible person. laugh )

I'll join the group in saying not to sweat your voice, but still try to present it in the best light. Pitching the song up a bit forces a bit more breath support and gives clearer pitch. Two birds with one stone! (OK, I'll stop already. wink )

Seems like I'm spending a disproportionate amount of time whining about a song that's actually rather good.

-- David Cuny
My virtual singer development blog

Vocal control, you say. Never heard of it. Is that some kind of ProTools thing?