Hey Tom,

I don't know if you like the word "vibrant" as much as you like the word "poignant" but it was the first one that appeared in my mind after I clicked the 'play' icon so I'm putting it out there smile

This is such a good write. As Herb has pointed out, it's a challenge focusing the lens of creativity onto a given topic and working within the walls of that room. You've acquitted yourself real well!

For what it's worth, I didn't hear these lyrics as 'preachy' in any way at all. The second verse with all its questions really diffuses the potential for preachiness. In addition, using first person plural when you ask the questions has both a personal and yet inclusive feel. The phrase "skilful craftsmanship" sums it up perfectly!

I also really liked that odd numbered bar you added in the chorus (at least it felt like an odd number!). It really made me sit up and pay attention!

All in all... terrific (and then some).

All the best,
Noel




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