Hi Richard,

There are terrific phrases in the lyrics... very inspired, indeed. Things like... "clouds of mystery cloak the sunrise" .... "savage shadows" ... "cold steel hides in velvet gloves", etc. These are such fantastic images. I'm not quite sure how they relate to the whole but it's very inventive writing.

If ever you revisit this, I would try singing the lyrics against a swing style. To my ears, it sounded like you were singing in a swing 8-beat and the drums were playing an even 8-beat. I found myself wondering what it would sound like if vocal rhythm and drum rhythm matched.... I simply pass the thought on for what it's worth. Please feel completely free to ignore.

Overall... another inventive listen!

All the best,
Noel


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