Cool tune.

The first verse had me thinking Jimmy Buffett... changes in attitudes, changes in latitudes a bit.... not enough to consider infringement.... just enough to say, hey, that sounds kinda like......

Cool story in the song.

Nits... you caught a few of your own. That's a good thing. Mixing on cans.... I do it on occasion. It's always important to listen on a well balanced monitor system. I don't take the cans off and hit the monitors. I allow at a minimum, one hour or better yet, next day since the cans are like ear candy and change your perception of the monitors.

BGV are slightly off key.

The rhyme scheme didn't really catch my attention. You have a few nice lyric lines in there regardless.

All in all, a good song, well done, and enjoyable.

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