Originally Posted By: floyd jane
Hi, Noel!

Always pleased to see a song from you pop up... never fails to be "written with a smile"...

Nice opening - drums to piano chords with a stop...

And... a limerick lyric to open! HA! timely...
Nice internal - "And the leaves/ on the trees/ Dancing in the breeze..."
The F->FM on "way.." is a very nice touch...
LOVE the chord change at "Through it all..."
The 7th is a really nice way to end the bridge!
befalls me/stalls me - Well done! - and with the addition of "stops me" - icing on the cake...

You've used AABA perfectly. The 3 line tag to each verse is really well done. A very solid write - start to finish.

Beautiful production. Simple and full at the same time. The strings sound great and are used at the right times and to the perfect degree...

Your vocals are always good. This is your best! Comfortable and confident. Mixed perfectly.

This shines from every angle.

floyd


Hi floyd,

It's always great to see you. Thank you for the visit.

Also, thank you for the review! I sincerely appreciate it. When I used the limerick rhyme scheme (purely by accident), I immediately thought of you because I've noticed it once or twice in your works over the years.

If you're interested, I have now made the lead sheet of this song available on Soundcloud. In the bridge, I simply used 2m-5-1 first in F major and then in G major. At the end of the bridge, because I wanted to push headlong back into the key of C major, chord 1 in G is the same as chord 5 in C so I used 17 (the lead sheet shows this more clearly).

Thanks for noticing the 'befalls me / stops me / stalls me' - that's a personal favourite!

As already mentioned, I really do appreciate your comments a great deal. Thank you for taking the time.

All the best,
Noel

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