Nothing at all wrong with this - it's a great traditional country song and made me think of Jim reeves.

Clever story line and a nicely put together backing track.

The vocal might benefit from a bit of compression plus a gentle reverb and you might consider moving projects out of BiaB into Realband to add vocals. It's much easier there to perform overdubs and add effects.

For a first original song on the forum it's great. Keep at it.

Cheers, ROG.