The 1st thing that struck me was how toppy, narrow & midi sounding the drums are.
The cymbals are the main cause of that I think - whilst they do add almost all of the stereo image they are also the most in need of some softening.
There's a lot of build up in the high mids across the mix.
Your elements are pretty good though that lead thing sounds like a really low quality MP3 - the tunnel sound - it may be an effect you've chosen but it degrades the sound.
Over all for a new age/ambient construction you need more delay & reverb to soften things into each other.
I like your melody & arrangements but it's probably the newness to the DAW, that will soon be overcome, taht's holding the piece back.
A great start.

Cheers
rayc
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