Dave,

This is so strong—so much going on here that works so well. The first verse is exceptional, the melody to the verses is near perfect. If I were to nit-pick, in that second verse the “kill or be killed” line doesn’t quite resonate--maybe a bit too harsh-- nor “urge to deceive”—but’s that’s just my take. It may be an opportunity to tweak, or not. Use or lose.

The chorus is solid; lyrically killer and the phrasing is sweet. That said, it didn’t quite strike me as a chorus musically. Not sure how to express it, but it didn’t take me “up”. Kinda felt more like a bridge.

All that aside, this is a very impressive use of BIAB. Love the intro and the leads throughout—very crisp; really nice sound. You're killing in that regard.

Sweet tune, Dave—enjoyed it.

All the best,

Deej