Bob, loved this work...nice abstract imagery in the lyric, and I think your decision about using a simple, calming folky-type of style is just right for the messaging.

I did find one thing quite curious… I noticed in your verse that you matched lines 3 and 4 in verse 1 with lines 3 and 4 of verse two. I’m talking about the rhyming scheme. Did you consider switching them around so that you would have “losses/courses” in the same verse, getting a more tight-knit rhyme? Just curious!

Enjoyed it very much!