Thanks everybody! I tried to address some of the, to me, very valid points you made here. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=b9awDAptfis

I tried to remove all lip sounds and most of the sounds at the end of phrases. I did try to apply a little reverb, but felt it detracted from the sincere-sounding tone of voice when I did that, so brought it back to natural sound. To be honest, I'm still not really happy with the end product, but don't know what else to do with it, haha. I'm not a producer or sound engineer ... I'm just someone that writes music and lyrics ... maybe I'd need someone else to do the voiceover for me? who knows. Anyway, thanks for ALL your very kind suggestions ... if there are more, please keep them coming!