At the heart of this is a really nice song,

I find the vocaloid distracting but you have written

and show a very strong and likable melody.

I would love to take a crack at singing this

if you aren't a perfectionist, I may not be able to hit every note

as it recorded here but if you're open to my interpretation.

I would change the title to something else

maybe "one more time" or" I'll try one more time"

Anyway, I like this , I think it's a good write

enjoyed the listen,

Kenny