Lawrence..I’m sure there is a technical term for the construction you are using, where the first lyric line is repeated exactly, but with a slightly different harmonic. Whatever it’s called, it’s really effective here, so great choice in architecture! Then your bridge is less staccato and more legato, so great offset. I guess I haven’t been keeping track of dark overtones of your prior work, but if you were trying to swing upbeat, you done good! Really liked this end to end. Great work!