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Hi Noel!

I don't think the overdriven guitar fits your 'hapiness' theme. It is is not a bright sound. Put it way in the back, perhaps, to add some complexity. Where it is now it kind of takes over the tone of the song and works against your positive message. Try adding an instrument with a sweeter sound - flute, maybe. Maybe a rhodes. A very little bit of a GM pad playing whole notes might thicken up the chorus nicely.

Push all of the instruments WAY back. They are crowding out your lovely voice, and your message.

There are conflicting degrees of "brightness" in your lyrics. First you say you feel "pretty good" and "all right," which falls short of "the brightest ever been." Which is it? Just "pretty good" or "brightest ever?" Make it consistent.

I want to hear a reason for your exuberance. You mention "youve given me a recharge." Who is it that has done this for you - a lover? a little child? mother nature? God? How about a hint as to what happened?

Who is the "you" in "when you walked in?" If you were to tell me a little bit more about what happened, I could share your happiness more easily.

From where I sit in California, I think I detect a bit of an accent. The word 'shone' is not used in this part of the world. Particulars of language like these give your singing a distinctive quality and add interest.

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