Hello Hans!

I liked your arrangement! Especially what you did at 2:30 smile Lyrics are fun, maybe write them down. Some folks here (including me) like to read lyrics while listening. Overall, very good feel of this tune, I wholeheartedly enjoyed it.

Since you asked for suggestions... I think the only true weakness is the mix separation of vocals and instrumentals. Your instrumental arrangement is clear and balanced well (to my ears), but vocals seem to be a little detached and over reverbed, which makes it a little difficult to follow story line, (which is great)! When you have your bridge (or spoken word)part presence is much better. If it was my mix, I would bring vocals a couple of db louder and took out some of the reverb.

Thank you for sharing!

Misha.