That was done well. It's not often that one can take a poem and convert it directly to a song lyric as written.

Nice work.

On the band.... sometimes, less is more and that is the case here. I would have played a short and simple acoustic guitar solo in the short musical break. Nothing fancy... however, it's well done and stands on it's own as it is.


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Add nothing that adds nothing to the music.
You can make excuses or you can make progress but not both.

The magic you are looking for is in the work you are avoiding.