Nicely done!

I liked the mix. Perhaps the reverse cymbal sound at 1:16 is a bit too up-front.

1:30 sounded like the natural end, and at about 1:55 the repeated sax riff started to wear out it's welcome, but at that point you'd started a long fade, so can see the justification there. Perhaps if you'd faded the sax more during the end, it wouldn't have stuck out as much. Just my personal opinion, it's not "wrong" in any real sense.
-- David Cuny
My virtual singer development blog

Vocal control, you say. Never heard of it. Is that some kind of ProTools thing?