Hello Richard,

You have made a very nice song, though there is some room for improvement.
I agree with all who told you about the vocals and the band, the drums and room for other instruments.
About the vocals: they are very nice, but watch out for the amount of reverb. You could do with a bit less. I think the quality of the vocals will increase. But perhaps Misha is more clear on that part.

Hans


Hans Berkhout
(Birchwood)
https://soundcloud.com/user-296497130