I REALLY like the rough/raw guitar in the intro.
The songs sounds best when that energy is propelling it.
Your voice is good - a bit like Stan Ridgway.
The reverb on your voice seems at odds with backing and with the slightly too high level separates it from the mix.
I rather liked the abrupt ending.


Cheers
rayc
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