Originally Posted By: floyd jane
Originally Posted By: Guitarhacker

All this misery and pain
That you've put people through
devil you can go back to hell
And take cancer with you

As I read this.... first impression... You're talking to cancer.... I assume. Then you switch and now you're talking to the devil in the very next line and cancer is third person.... You might wish to rework that so you are talking to ONE person in the entire chorus....


I did not read it like that at all, and therefore, believe your assumption is incorrect. To me it reads as talking to "devil" the entire time and "cancer" is his "weapon" used to create misery and pain. In which case...no re-work would be required.

Another opinion.


(but I do agree that this should be in the Songwriting section of the forum)



you know..... reading it again, I do agree. My misunderstanding

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