James,
Interesting re-make. You are definitely getting better in your mixing / production skills.
Vocals sit well in the mix, but I think they would benefit more reverb to blend it better.

I am not sure if somebody had mentioned this or not. There are plugins that will suppress "breath" sound in vocals. I have an older Izotope Nectar 2 suit that has this plugin, that I use from time to time. I am sure there are others that are very similar. I know there are different techniques that one can try to eliminate breath sound, but plugin is very effective. You just put it on your vocal track, set amount and it will do the magic.
Thank you for sharing.

Misha.