Dero13,
Very interesting syncopation and articulation! Good choice of instruments. I think it has potential to explore. Enjoyed it!

Since you are open to comments, here is my observation. I think this type of composition needs a rest, somewhere in the middle. Slowing, or perhaps a short solo instrument in legato side of things. Also the orchestral strings. I would experiment with octave lower or maybe moving octave up/down at different sections or even playing two octaves at same time with different strings. Please do not take my opinions as from someone who knows, I do not, just thoughts.
Thank you for sharing!

Misha.