Hi all, thanks for the listens and comments - all really helpful and - not sure of the expression - but very confidence building! It's also confirmed I've a few small adjustments to make for a final mix.

Originally Posted By: VideoTrack
Fantastic set of lyrics all encapsulated in a quality musical delivery.

Really enjoyed this. A dynamic, quality production.


Thank you VideoTrack, much appreciated! I do like a lyric that tells a story.

Originally Posted By: Dero13
Hellodjames,

Very pleasant composition. The arrangement is perfect. The vocals a little behind find their place. Lelyric well written and reproduced.


Kindly regard

Dero13
alias JaniJackFlash


Thanks Dero13, the vocal was sung to the rocky version so fortunately the timing worked in the end.

Originally Posted By: Robertkc
David,
The simple arrangement works well- I like the melody with nice peaks the vocalist ( not sure if that`s you?)handles well until the closing repeats which I thought became a little ragged.
I enjoyed the lyrics which hint at the push and pull of doubts and hopes.

Robert


Thanks Robert, it's not me singing - I wish! - but yes I was in two minds whether to leave it like that or use Melodyne to make a slight adjustment. I did think about putting a twist in the last part of the lyric but thought it might spoil it, so hints are good.

Originally Posted By: TuneMonger
I absolutely loved the melody, one of the best I've heard here on the User Showcase. Vocals were terrific as well. Put it on the radio!


Oh wow, thanks TuneMonger, that is high praise indeed!! From your lips to a radio pluggers ears :-)

Originally Posted By: rayc
Nice stuff.
I found the right hand of the piano a bit loud and the bass seems off centre which is a little muddy too with the bottom end of the piano.
The vocalist has nice, grainy voice and the melody is pretty good.
I think the cello in the solo could come up...perhaps not as loud as the vocal but getting closer than it as as it sounds a little undefined at the current low volume.
You could've just changed the key in the key signature box.
Nice work though.


Thanks Ray, I'll look at those for the final mix, and yes the cello solo is a bit too low.

Regards the key change, I did try initially but as it was mostly edited together in Reaper, I gave up. Good job in the end :-)

Originally Posted By: Birchwood
Hi David,

Simple songs can often be very good. Yours is no exception to that.
A really nice song you made. I liked it a lot!
I'm afraid I don't have any specific things to help you improve this song.
It is good and your vocals are very well!
Maybe that tiny hoarse moment in your vocals at the end of the song.
But it is also the nice expression of emotions.


Hans


Thanks Hans, appreciate the listen and comments. I agree with the emotion / wobble on the voice at the end.


Again, thank you all,
David

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