Greg,

Very well done! Great prosody between the words and music.

Consider revising this verse:

Frantic fools just fighting, trying to get ahead
Each one scrapping for his share
Is it comedy or tragedy you see
When you take in the view from there?

All the other verses focus on the father / son relationship. This one doesn't, which makes it out of place.

One idea would be to express the unfairness of death from the son's point of view, but hoping for understanding in 'the view from there'

Another idea would be to cut this verse but add a verse towards the end of the singer talking about struggling with his son (the grandson)....and understanding what the father was trying to before...

Or you could drop this verse and the rest of the song would still stand on its own.......keep at it! This one's a gem!

Cheers,

James