Originally Posted By: BabuMusic
Such a fun journey, David. I listened to both version, and prefer the female --not just because I usually do, but the content seems to fit better. (well, that's a pretty useless comment).

I'll admit, the female lead worked out better than I thought it would. I could spend more time cleaning it up, but I think I'll focus on the next song instead.

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I like how you compose with passion and purpose, and I really like The Backstory --entertaining AND informative and useful.

Well, if you call banging my head against the wall passion... wink

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Yes, I caught all the references except the rabbit. i was trying to fit it in Alice's rabbit hole.

They're related, which is probably why I thought of in the first place.

I also took liberties with the word "old" here. The original line was:

Stuffed rabbit in a field
telling others he is real

But without context, it was hard to understand the word "stuffed". By putting it into a less fragmented sentence, I hoped to make it easier to understand, although "old" really doesn't happen until later in the story. Call it poetic license. laugh

Perhaps something like this would eliminate the ambiguity:

Velveteen rabbit in a field
tells wild rabbits he is real

I'll give it some more consideration.

Thanks for stopping by and commenting! laugh

-- David Cuny
My virtual singer development blog

Vocal control, you say. Never heard of it. Is that some kind of ProTools thing?