Hans,
cool song but three things struck me:
There's something hyped and a bit too aggressive in your vocal treatment. I suspect that hearing fatigue would happen after a couple of end to end listens.

the kick drum is quite aggressive in tone and level..not much can be done in BIAB but a multi band compressor might let you treat it in a DAW.

and

Lyrics...
"I called you so many times
Wishing you would hear my sound
But that didn't happen
While I thought we had a bound"
I think the correct final word in that stanza may be "bond".

A lovely story, a good melody and structure.


Cheers
rayc
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