As a non Continental America I hear the language slightly differently...
In the line
"Comin' home one night... Or was it early the next day?"
The use of THEEE rather than the softer the (thuh) sticks out.
Partially because of my regional bias but also becasue THEE seems to be a bit emphatic and formal in that line.
I wouldn't change it for me but have a listen and suss out whether formality and emphasis are required.
The song's a cracker ... I really enjoyed it.


Cheers
rayc
"What's so funny about peace, love & understanding?" - N.Lowe