Hi Hans,

I really, really like this.

Your arrangement is spectacular. The beginning acoustic sound leading into a full rock band is perfect. It's easy to see the effect of this arrangement in the shape of the waveform on Soundcloud. The wave's amplitude is smaller at the start and progressively gets larger and larger as intensity increases because the arrangement develops. This overall "megaphone" shape is not something I've ever seen before on Soundcloud.

The standout for me was how you structured your verses. It was very, very effective. That is...

(1) "word-1," repeat "word-1" with more information
(2) add more meaning to the previous line (1)
(3) "word-2," repeat "word-2" with more information
(4) add extra meaning to line (3) and rhyme with line (2)

This structure strategy is a brilliant way to add emotional development to lyrics. You captured my imagination with it. I'm going to have to try my hand as creating some lyrics using this approach!

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In the meantime, here's my variation of "Mary Had A Little Lamb" using your approach...

Mary, such a happy girl is Mary
And everywhere she walks her lamb's behind her
Snowflakes, with fleece as white as snowflakes
That lamb will wander near and far to find her


I'm heading back for another listen now!

All the best,
Noel

P.S.Thanks so much for the lessons in arranging and lyric writing. I sincerely appreciate them. That was the proverbial "icing on the cake" for me.

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