your a very good lyricist mate.
the spread of your lyrics/ideas is very impressive.
i liked the lead break, maybe with a little less fuzz.

best to you.
om


New Song "PRETTY GIRL" for my wife...Dec 2023
(my vocs....mixed for good earbuds.)
https://soundcloud.com/alfsongs/prettygirlrbfinalcalfsongsdec2023mp3
(and rock song THE STALLION and bluegrass song... BANKER MAN....90 songs useing bb/rb.)